HOLiC: The Arrow

[lazulisong]

I do not like how this turned out.

Title: The Arrow
Series: xxxHOLIC
Characters/Pairing: Doumeki -> Watanuki
Rating: G
xxxHOLiC © a lot of people who are not me.
Spoilers for like, ch70ish? if you know what I'm talking about, anyway.
leik omg r&r plz kthx.

Comments

[tommyrotter]

...! =D

It's so rare to find good xxxholic fanfiction (I believe I can count it on my hand) and this is one of them. It's just so beautiful and in character and bittersweet and endearing an ahh! This is just wonderful.

So much love for you! =D

[ickaimp]

Oooo...
Part of me wants to make a pithy comment about Doumeki shooting Watanuki with his Arrows of Lurve.
But we're going to ignore that impulse and applaude you for a wonderful story instead. ^____^

Oh, by the way.... if you're looking for Yaoi scanlations, have you looked here? tokudane

[regonym]

:) Cool.

-Clayr

[sic_re_vera]

Awesome job. I really love how you portrayed Doumeki's opinions of love and hate, and how true those opinions are in general!

I also how you alternated the paragraphs of actions and thoughts. And it's in present tense, which is impressive to me because I can't write in present tense. Once again: awesome.

[ii_hanashi]

k i totly likd ths ur te best ther wer ters in my eye rite more kay?

...Or not.

I liked this. I like the way you parallel Doumeki's thoughts to his actions. I like the deliberateness of Doumeki's thoughts, how his choice was never really a choice. Love is better, of course, but anything is better than nothing at all. This line=♥

And Watanuki must be the blindest thing in the world. The universe, even. Even Himawari has noticed. 'You seem less energetic without Doumeki-kun' indeed. *snorts*