Comments | laylat: Red Wine is Best for Brooding

laylat

Red Wine is Best for Brooding

Sep 22, 2008 16:12

my entry number two for the Fragments of Sappho challenge.

inspired by fragment number 42: neither for me honey nor the honey bee

again check out the rest of the entries @ dogged_by_muses

( all it seems to take is being true to myself and caring slightly less about appearances than i care about my own happiness )

criminal minds, fanfic, jj/emily

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laylat September 23 2008, 04:18:26 UTC

i'm thrilled you enjoyed this little bit i have to say it was a thrill to get back into Emily's head...it's been a long summer and I haven't done nearly enough writing and I've left everyone hanging on UC so i have to get back to it...i'm really glad you like this 'warm up'

and i'm excited for the season premier too...i can't help it...and i've managed to say spoiler free so i can be properly horrified

geekgrrllurking September 23 2008, 02:26:33 UTC

Oh, this was good. I love the title but it made me a bit leery that this would be all depressing and have someone blow up at the end. Lol! So glad to be wrong.

Thanks for another great story and the happy ending!

laylat September 23 2008, 04:19:59 UTC

LOL no, in my world there are no explosions...and up to now no cap't crawfish either...but i guess i finally had to go there *g*

and i'm a sucker for a happy ending...can't resist 'em

thanks for reading, and the kind comments

shatterpath September 23 2008, 03:08:57 UTC

And you were WORRIED...

This was awesome! Love the transition from angst to happy, as I'm a sucker for the rollercoastering that you supply so amply.

laylat September 23 2008, 04:21:27 UTC

Nah...once you dared me i knew i'd pull it off...like i said i can never turn down a dare *g*

and i'm thrilled you enjoyed the ride ;)

elekanahmen September 23 2008, 06:16:58 UTC

that was beautiful darling...

*swoonsigh*

laylat September 23 2008, 14:55:29 UTC

why thank you :D

atfm September 24 2008, 19:59:21 UTC

Beautifully done - Emily's musings were so clear and honest, you delved into her mind masterfully.

I especially liked these two lines:

My walls are strong because I fear my heart is not.

It seems so Emily to not even be certain whether her heart is strong because she never allows her walls to crumble.

I let it read there easily

Emily's conscious decision to allow JJ to read everything she feels in her eyes has something so intimate and seems to reveal a great deal of trust.

I liked this very much. :)

laylat September 29 2008, 02:04:00 UTC

thank you!

i'm so glad you appreciated my little trek through emily's mind.

the line about emily's heart was one of those bits that sort of springs into the head from some unknown place but feels completely right i'm thrilled it rang true to someone else as well.

again thank you for your kind words they are, as always, greatly appreciated.