Boxing Day

[laurie_bunter]

My first Shunsui x Nanao vignette, written with _debbiechan_ in mind :) I hope I got them just right.

I might submit this to the BA Festive Art Contest, I'm still thinking about it...

No beta, as usual. Bad habits die hard, but then again it's such a short story... Grammar corrections are welcome, as usual. :)

title: Boxing Day
characters/pairings:

Comments

[shalomdebbie]

AHHHHHHHHHHH! *FLAILS AROUND* That was so THEM. I love your narrative voice--you always manage to keep true to the characters you're writing while maintaining a consistent author-tone that doesn't distract from the story. So smart and so funny.

“I told you not to get drink at the party,” Should be drunk.
Otherwise, I am a terrible beta reader and I never catch anything.

I love this story. <3 And you. <3

[laurie_bunter]

Whee! I'm glad you liked it! *hugs* Thank you for egging me on to write something for this pair. :)

Thanks too for the correction. *sheepish grin* I think it's a curse -- I mean, I'm competent enough when copy-editing other people's work, but I never seem to catch my own gaffs. Ack.

[thesoundofsisu]

Did I mention you were awesome? 'Cause you are. Completely brilliant at capturing the characters....I can't even write complete sentences...!

[laurie_bunter]

Thanks :) Aw. And you do write complete sentences... don't shortchange yourself!

*gets bonked on the head for being so literal* XD

[adam_epp]

How do you write something this short? For that matter, how the hell did I write a 700-word story half a year ago?!

My confusion with the weird phenomenon of becoming increasingly long-winded aside, I don't got much to say about this. Spelling's okay, characters act like the characters, and the story is too short for me to find any major flaws.

I guess I don't like how Boxing Day/ Christmas is mentioned (since I think it's crazy that these Shinigami should have Christmas shenanigans. Wouldn't they have their own holidays? Why doesn't somebody write that story?) On the other hand, I suppose that's the kind of thing you and a multitude of readers can better relate to, and I do realize that it is the holiday season. Plus, this allows you enter the contest (which I expect you to do now. By the way, this should be a T Rating, in my opinion

[laurie_bunter]

Well, the average magazine article (in print) is 1,000 to 2,000 words, so it's good to know how to control your word count. While I can get very verbose too, its hard to have something lengthy actually published.

Yeah, it would be cool to create a Shinigami-only holiday, something quirky... perhaps inspired by an actual Japanese festival. For the sake of clarity I had to explain Boxing Day, btw, for readers not familiar with it :) (I only know about it myself from reading too many British mysteries.) Yamamoto's vice-captain is supposed to be obsessed with Western culture, while Yamamoto's a traditionalist... that's why I felt it would fit or at least be excusable in fanfic. I wanted to hint at how people with opposing ideas can actually get along and appreciate each other, but perhaps that fell flat. Whatever. *shrugs*

I do know that Christmas is for lovers in Japan... that's why Nanao is quite peeved in the story. I think I was aiming for multicultural fluff with a wink.

[windxalchemist]

SHUNSUI/NANAO FTW!!!
:D

I love this pairing!
you hit all my pairing spots, Laurie.
<33333

[laurie_bunter]

Whee :) I'm glad you like Shunsui x Nanao too. As much as I loooove IchiRuki to death, it's nice to have a change of pace. Besides, I think I don't want to be pigeonholed as a one ship fic writer! XD

[annieroo2]

Oh this was so very cute! It amused me to no end. And i do think you got them just right. ;)

Thanks for sharing this thoroughly enjoyable little holiday fic!

[laurie_bunter]

You're welcome :D I'm glad you liked it. I was thinking of extending the scene for more naughty bits, but the story itself wanted to end there. It was begging, "End here! End here!" XD