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Learn By Going

Feb 11, 2010 17:21

Title: Learn By Going
Author: latetothpartyhp
Pairing: Chlollie
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: Smut, bad language, angst, hurt/comfort, some gory imagery. First time writing Chlollie & first attempt at smut. If you were a big, big Chimmy fan you might not want to read this.
Spoilers: through Roulette
Short summary: This is set some time after Roulette. AU ( Read more... )

chloe sullivan, chlollie, fic: learn by going, oliver queen

Comments 30

fickletastictot February 12 2010, 22:03:41 UTC

This is sooooo good. It's like, yeah, one-two punch by dealing with Chloe and Oliver's growing attraction together and then delving into the problems each of them has been having in the show, but it was done so much better than the show ever could! Great flow, great dialogue and amazing handling of awkward first time sex and how they come together in this whole thing, really.

You were also incredibly vivid in your descriptions of how Chloe felt and heard, from the sounds to how food tasted and the feel of body heat... it was like a sensory overload. XD

Anyways, I gotta stop flailing. Loved it! And thank you for posting this!

latetothpartyhp February 13 2010, 18:03:48 UTC

Well thank you for reading! As I imagine it, Chloe's in a place where she could be easily over-whelmed by even the simplest of things, so I think allowing herself to actually experience something (coffee, spicy food, sex) is a Big Deal, so I'm tickled you liked that. Thanks.

novadelphine February 12 2010, 23:27:05 UTC

Good. So, so good. Don't even know where I want to begin with this comment cause it's that good ( ... )

latetothpartyhp February 13 2010, 18:14:54 UTC

"Plus, it was just freakin hot!"

Sighs with relief. It was really scary posting this; like Chloe, I was thinking, "what if I try to talk dirty and instead of being hot it's just kinda lame?" So thank you!

The waffling bit was really hard to write. I feel as if she's backed down on so many things that mattered to her before, and I didn't know exactly how to get her head into a place so she didn't do that again. But then I remembered that for Chloe the Job is first. She's not just fighting for him or for her; she's also fighting for the people who need them. That's one thing I really like about the idea of Chlollie -- it gives Chloe scope for all her passions.

flareonfury February 13 2010, 04:19:34 UTC

♥ absolutely loved this... excellent job for your first time.

latetothpartyhp February 13 2010, 18:23:30 UTC

thank you for reading!

slytherinpunk February 13 2010, 04:31:51 UTC

Wow. I loved how you managed to make this feel both raw and intimate. Fantastic job! =)

latetothpartyhp February 13 2010, 18:23:46 UTC

thank you for reading!

msedopportunity February 13 2010, 16:51:07 UTC

THIS was your first attempt at smut? Really? Because that was amazing! It was very unique, which I love. This could easily have followed Warrior. I LOVE LOVE your take on Chloe. I love the bits of humor you put in there with all the angst. This is so how I picture Chlollie. It would be dream if the show does half as good a job. Please write more!

latetothpartyhp February 13 2010, 18:23:15 UTC

Thank you; like I said above, it was scary posting smut 'cuz it seems like something very easy to get wrong. And, I too really, really hope the show it gets it right (the Chlollie, I meant; I don't think the CW would ever allow this type of smut!).

msedopportunity February 13 2010, 19:23:44 UTC

well those CW people are just no fun lol

Trust me. You didn't get it wrong. I've read quite a bit of smut and I'd say yours stands out as one of the better ones. I prefer smut to have a good build up (which you did) and to be unique so it's not just any smut scene that could be anyone (which you also accomplished very well) You completely nailed Chloe and Oliver's mind sets before, during and after. I don't like when sex is written to make everything tie up in a pretty bow and they live happily ever after. I liked that Chloe still had insecurities after. I like that there was an ease between them, but still tension. It was just really really good and I recommended it on Defying Mythos, cause I think every Chlollie fan should read it.

latetothpartyhp February 15 2010, 23:50:37 UTC

"I like that there was an ease between them, but still tension."

Heh. Yes. And, just to let you know, I pretty much plagiarized this definition for a post about romantic/sexual chemistry on twop. It says concisely what I myself took about four paragraphs to say. Now I totally gotta go back & credit you.

Thank you for the rec. *blushes*