Comments | lassarina: Blarg

lassarina

Blarg

Jan 26, 2007 13:43

LaSalle is charging me $96 worth of overdraft fees, which means I'm fucked. Sigh. Hate them.

Reading celeloriel's comments on Every Light. Have I mentioned, Cel, that you are the most kickass person ever? (Sidenote to Cel: Yes, very archaic in most places. Intentionally so. I think that one line, "If I do, pray kill me" lodged the notion in my brain ( Read more... )

editing, nanowrimo 2006, every light casts a shadow, cel rocks my socks

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celeloriel January 27 2007, 07:00:22 UTC

It's a great line - but the thing is you just need to PICK: archaic or anachronistic? "pray kill me" sends one message but "paperwork" sends a totally different one, and it yanks me out of the fic if I'm anticipating "ought" or "scribery" or whatever.

Kain gets my undead hunter icon.

lassarina January 28 2007, 01:01:58 UTC

Archaic, definitely, and I will go back and fix the things you commented on. Honestly I am surprised there are not more anachronisms, given the speed at which I wrote this.