Silence

Aug 01, 2004 04:28

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Interesting story raakone August 2 2004, 10:03:54 UTC
Morbid? Yes. Did I like it? Also yes.
I liked the details of sounds and movements. You're good at capturing them. And the death scene was original....Only once before did I read about someone deliberatly falling through the ice to end it all. It was a nice twist as I thought she was going to kill herself with the ice pick.

~Ra'akone

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kainhavel August 2 2004, 13:46:33 UTC
Good story.

I'm eagerly anticipating the sequel where her cancer is cured, good wins, evil loses, Jesus and the Buddha are reborn, and everyone sits in a circle and sings kumbaya. Right?

It was extremely well-written. I love having the "something is wrong and I want to find out what" feeling when I'm reading a story and this definitely evoked that to the extreme.

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lassarina August 2 2004, 18:52:51 UTC
That's what I was going for, yeah :) I meant to keep the reader confused right up till the last bit as to whether she was going to kill him, leave him, or kill herself.

Thanks for the commentary!

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