Unfortunately, I have not read the related entries, so I lack that perspective, but I enjoyed this on its own. It takes a lot of guts to put your own poetry (and unduly criticize it) in a story in which you're quoting Hawthorne and Maya Angelou. I love Hawthorne's fiction; I had not read this poem, so I'm glad you included it.
Well, I started out as wanting to do a poem as a tribute to the late Ms Angelou and the topic seemed perfect for that, but I wasn't happy with how it was going and couldn't figure out how to fix it. As I was staring at that, Kara finally started talking to me again. The Hawthorne was a lucky find... I'd never read his poetry before either!
I suppose I shouldn't slam my own writing on a writing contest - but it just wasn't quite the poem I had hoped for. Thanks for reading!
I adore this. I am grateful for the nod to the lovely late laureate, I enjoyed seeing Kara and the Doc when things were good, and I actually really appreciated her poem... I feel there are reflections of her connection to Keelie in it... I can see the movements of the pod in some of the descriptions there, and the love one feels could easily relate to the love one has for those friends who don't necessarily share our same genetic markers. Well done here, even if you did sort of pull it out of thin air... sometimes those are the surprisingly some of the best hiding places for great work.
I was going to go for poetry this week - in honor, of course, and because it seemed to fit the theme. I was stalled out and unhappy with the results when Kara started talking to me again.
I really am enjoying putting this story together. I've seen people do things like this on past idols and wondered how the heck they kept things straight. It's easier than it looks, and harder too when the characters don't speak up about a topic. Sometimes you have to get in their face and annoy them until they tell you to shut up - at least then they're talking! Lol
I love it too, and "caged bird" seemed to make sense, since Keelie is "trapped" by the water and Kara is "trapped" by her inexperience - and both of them are going to break the cage. ;)
I kind of wish I could have found a way for the Angelou poem to be "phenomenal woman" (my favorite) without overplaying the good Doctor's hand. After all, Kara's still a student at this point. :)
Thanks. I'm trying to have each piece stand on its' own, but some of the other bits help each part make more sense. Like right now, you're probably wondering, just like Kara did, why Dr Hiller would know it was her last GenEd class. But if you knew he sponsored her for the scholarship she's enjoying, got her the research assistant job so she could help out with his project, etc. you might agree that he would be inclined to keep an eye on her and know where she's at with her education, yes? Just little things like that that help the story be well-rounded.
Glad you liked the story, and the tribute - thanks for reading!!
I like Kara more and more each installment. And each installment intensifies the notion that Dr Hiller has "issues". I wonder what Keelie would think of Kara's poem. And I'll second rayaso's comment on your piece of original poetry. You're overly harsh on your work.
Not bad, just has issues with people. He may eventually surprise me but for now he's either a douche or he has 'a condition' which would be totally not his fault
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The Hawthorne was a lucky find... I'd never read his poetry before either!
I suppose I shouldn't slam my own writing on a writing contest - but it just wasn't quite the poem I had hoped for. Thanks for reading!
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I was going to go for poetry this week - in honor, of course, and because it seemed to fit the theme. I was stalled out and unhappy with the results when Kara started talking to me again.
I really am enjoying putting this story together. I've seen people do things like this on past idols and wondered how the heck they kept things straight. It's easier than it looks, and harder too when the characters don't speak up about a topic. Sometimes you have to get in their face and annoy them until they tell you to shut up - at least then they're talking! Lol
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I kind of wish I could have found a way for the Angelou poem to be "phenomenal woman" (my favorite) without overplaying the good Doctor's hand. After all, Kara's still a student at this point. :)
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Also, I missed seeing the links to other parts of this story, but it stands very well on its own!
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Glad you liked the story, and the tribute - thanks for reading!!
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And I'll second rayaso's comment on your piece of original poetry. You're overly harsh on your work.
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Dunno if Keelie would grok Kara's poem... Maybe if they shared it during the trip, while they were in cold sleep....
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