you split me at my seams

[lalawrites]

Title: The Motionless Hours (II)
Disclaimer: all made up
Characters: Fernando Torres, Martin Škrtel, the Liverpool crowd
Rating: PG-13 this part
Summary: AU. Fernando is obsessive compulsive. Martin doesn’t hold back

Comments

[mira_miracle]

This was fantastic! I absolutely adored your characteriation of Fernando as a shy, list-obsessed nerd who doesn't talk to strangers and has this huge emotional baggage of an unrequited love. Also, Skrtel is really fascinating his calm self-esteem is captured just perfectly. Also, him running away just fits, in a way.
This was really lovely, I'm looking forward to the next part!

*whispers* unless this is set before 1918, St. Petersburg isn't quite the russian capital...

[lalawrites]

ah, i know moscow is the capital! i had just finished reading about czar nicholas II so i guess a bit of my mind was still stuck in the past. fixed now.

[jumping_down]

Ooh. If there's one Martin/Fernando story I'd read, it's this one. I was so in love with your first chapter, I've been praying for a continuation! SFPISWIPRPS. Hee, I love Fernando making uneven lists. XP And even the backstory of Skrtel was completely amazing.

[lalawrites]

aw, shucks.

[bluethursdays]

I'VE BEEN WAITING FOR THE SECOND PART FOR SO LONG!!!!! I really love this, I really really do. I love Fernando's pros/cons list and the detail that he crossed out one for the sake of symmetry. Lovely, can't wait for the next part, hope it's not as long as the wait for this one! =D

[lalawrites]

sorry the wait was so long! i had a month off footie fic writing for vacay!

[bluethursdays]

No no, take your time, I'd rather it be a bit longer wait and be good and long, over hurried and rushed. =)

Also, I'm going to laugh my pants off if Martin finds that list. XD

[aguardente]

AN UPDATE! Jeez, this is so gorgeous, one of the best AU's I've read! ♥
Your writing is so damn fine, girl, and it's such a pleasure to find someone who shares Martin!love, I'm still in awe :)

I like that you take your time and show different aspects of the boys' lives, not making then shag straight away. Both Martin and Fernando are so lovely with their own peculiarities, I just adore you for the whole idea ♥

[lalawrites]

thank you. i actually don't write sex scenes very much, and on the rare occasion i do, it's usually pretty vague. not that i don't enjoy reading a steamy boy-on-boy scene, but when it comes to writing, i prefer exploring everything leading up to the sex. ah, i know, i demand sex, but don't write it! :p

of course, the not-writing-explicit-sex thing is definitely about to change, ha.

[robbie96]

Just stumbled across your fics this morning.......loved it...great writing.....your characterizations are quite unique....looking forward to reading some more........Cheers.