Boston 2

[ladyjanelly]

Playing with mood.  How's connor in this?

(same warnings etc as last chapter, plus moody!Connor)

Comments

[ladyjanelly]

Yes, more goodness on the way. Working on my existing BDS fic this week but still playing with Boston in my head.

Heh, somehow I see many points in the past of this timeline where something was about Murphy getting laid and ended in disaster. Poor long-suffering Connor.

[roadparty]

Ok, I missed the beginning of this. But I really like what's here.

"Make him better,"

I like that a lot. Like it hurts Murphy to watch someone else hurt.

[ladyjanelly]

The beginning is just like three posts back in my lj if you're looking for it. I'm trying to get some feedback here before I post it to the emslash comm or the bds comm.

Like it hurts Murphy to watch someone else hurt.

I always saw him as the more empathic of the two. Connor can light a man's ass on fire and watch it burn. I don't think Murphy would have been capable of that.

Connor went sort of introspective and melancholy on me in this one. I wasnt sure if it was just me being in a mood or if it was IC. Any feelings on that?

[roadparty]

Connor's always introspective. Even if it's just enough to say I'm strangely comfortable with that. He is colder and harder than Murphy. You can see it in the movie and you carried that over here nicely. *nods* I like it. And once I get to work I'll go back and find the beginning.

[amourality]

Yay! Another part :D. I'm so loving this story.

This better not be about Murphy getting laid, Connor thinks to himself

Lol :D. I love that line.

Great job, honey. Can't wait for the next part :D.

Btw, I archived the first part under Jimmy/Murphy. I was guessing at the future pairing. You don't have to tell me if I'm right if it'll spoil the story; I just thought I'd let you know *kisses*.

[ladyjanelly]

That's cool. I am working on some revisions first before I post it to the bds and emslash comms. When they're done can i get you to unarchive the first draft and rearchive the good one?

Yeah, the Murphy/Jimmy thing shouldnt be a surprise. :)

[amourality]

Sorry, I was so excited by the story, I forgot to answer the question :\.

I think Connor sounds fine. I didn't notice anything that seemed out of place. He just came across as instrospective and concerned.

[ladyjanelly]

Cool. Just making sure.

*watches the Stan video* Em is a leftie, right?

Why does that make it so much more interesting that he's with Murphy in this fic?

[amourality]

*nods* The man is indeed left-handed :D.

Why does that make it so much more interesting that he's with Murphy in this fic?

Lol, yeh ;D.

[cucumberstar]

I liked that Connor started thinking about kids and family they'll never have. Also this is probably a common thing in your BDS writing, but I like how so much gets said in looks between the brothers. It makes Jimmy's presence interesting, because Connor and Murphy have such a strong short hand it's like throwing a wrench into all that. If that makes any sense?

Heh, I'm very excited to see you add more. I have such a soft spot for hurty/comfort boy fic. :)

[ladyjanelly]

Somehow they click together much more when there's an outside presence for them to communicate around than when it's just the two of them not saying the things they should be saying to each other.

Hurty/comfort? Probably not how I'd describe what's in my head for this one, but you be the judge. Hope you keep liking it.

[cucumberstar]

Heh, that makes it better cause now I have no idea where this is heading. Me = excited.