(fic) An Office (As postulated by Schrödinger) (team angst)

[ladygray99]

Title: An Office (As postulated by Schrödinger) (team angst)
Author: ladygray99 
Pairing/Characters: Don
Rating/Category: PG, Gen, pre-show
Spoilers: Identity Crisis 1.08
Summary: Don is like a cat in a box and he’s tired of wondering if he’s alive or dead.
Notes: For some reason these numb3rswriteoff  fics keep coming out gen. I would like feedback since this is a little

Comments

[knotted_rose]

Thanks for sharing! I liked this.

[ladygray99]

Well thank you for reading.

[mikes_grrl]

I don't know what you were trying for, but holy shit this is EXCELLENT. Every word. I can see this so vividly, the confluence of events and facts leading Don to the place he is here.

Since I don't know Numb3rs canon all that well, I can't judge from that angle, but in my head, this is PRECISELY how it would have gone down with Don. He would have figured out that he was not making the next step up in baseball, he would of course have a plan B, and then something happening to spur the decision into being. Yes yes yes.

And I like this as a great representation of the brothers:
Charlie had babbled on about the math. Don had admired the skill and precision.
Very insightful breakdown of who they are, and their differences.

[ladygray99]

We don't know much about Don's baseball years. Just that at some point when he was in the minors he hit a double that should have been out of the park and filled out the application for the FBI after the game.

I'm glad you liked it. I'm always curios as to what you think of my fics (you still owe me one for Someplace Safe). I'm a little surprised that people see to like it since this is a fic I didn't sweat bullets over. I just scribbled it down in a day really and tried to give an image of the moment as clearly as I could.

[starlettmalfoy]

I agree, this is excellent. Beyond excellent, even.

I always love seeing inside Don's head before he became an agent. I mean, the giant leap from baseball player to the FBI.. it's just so radically different, that it warrants looking into.

Which you've done brilliantly. It flowed nicely, and as someone mentioned above, the contrast between the brothers' thought processes made it all the sweeter. I love the image of a drunken Charlie rambling on about Schrödinger's Cat to his big brother. *loves*

But my favorite part was the mention of 'that girl'. I'm not really sure exactly why, but it really struck a chord with me. Don's good, protective nature coming forth when he sees the damsel in distress. It's just so... I don't know. Wonderful, yet... heartbreaking? Bittersweet, maybe. Hmm.

All in all, it's a good day when you update with a new fic. :P <3

[ladygray99]

I'm glad you liked it. I was really just trying to capture a moment in time. Just a couple of minutes really instead of doing a full worked out story. Just Don in the box/office. I'm not sure where the girl came from but I figure Don would have a knight in shinning Armour complex at any point in his life and I wanted a moment for Don to realize that maybe, just maybe he could hack it as one of the good guys.

[mia_dcwut_09]

nice little fic
I loved how Don related things to charlie

[ladygray99]

I was trying to have Charlie in, but not in the fic the same way Charlie was in, but not in Charlie's life.

[mia_dcwut_09]

hmmm... makes since in some odd way

[sunlesslands]

I really enjoyed this fic! Your characterization of Don in it just feels so perfect and the mention of Charlie was also a little distant which rings true of their relationship before the show. The picture of them getting drunk together, which is such a brotherly-bonding thing and neither of them can quite cross the divide of Charlie talking math and Don trying to make sense of it. This definitely has the quality of peeking into Don’s life for those few minutes to explain his decision and how it came about - yeah, he’s such a good guy, it’s just a wonderful story.

[ladygray99]

Glad you liked it. We know so little of Don pre show I was worried about keeping him recognizable and yet at the same time in a different place than we know him now.