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FIC: Ice Cream Is No Substitute for a Family Outing

Jun 09, 2008 00:43

Title: Ice Cream Is No Substitute for a Family Outing
Summary: Gabe Sullivan takes his daughter Chloe and his niece Lois on a roadtrip.
Rating: G
Word Count: 3900
Notes: I’m using Chloe’s backstory from “Legacy.” Thanks to the show, I have to PICK one of the FOUR we’re given which do not gel with one another. Thx.
Prompted from tobywolf13's kidfic-a-thon.

( The Midwestern sky was blazing hot that day as Gabe Sullivan pulled into the parking lot of a small diner painted garishly in pink and turquoise. The whole state was warm and muggy, it seemed, and the air conditioner was only doing a little to cut them some slack. He sighed, marshaling the last bit of his patience, and turned to the two young girls in the back. His eight-year-old niece Lois was pulling a comic book out of five-year-old Chloe’s hands. )

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Comments 14

herohunter June 9 2008, 05:58:38 UTC

Awwww! So sweet and sad and cute, and having *4* plotlines to choose from, from one show alone, is madness!

Oh. Wait.

Welcome to SV! :P

ladydreamer June 9 2008, 07:03:02 UTC

hehe. YES. Thanks babe! :D

roxymissrose June 9 2008, 13:13:06 UTC

wow, I'm really glad I clicked on that. You wrote the heck out of little Lois. she was everything that makes her annoying, and makes her lovable. Lois saving grace is that she really cares about the people she knows. Her reaching out to Chloe is more than being taught to be a little mother (poor kid) but part of her goodness. That she can also be bossy and pushy, well--it's something you've just got to take to get the good parts.

really, it was a wonderful read. I felt terrible for baby conspiracy theorist Chloe, trying to find a substitute mom, and poor Gabe, struggling along. What a decent guy he is here.

What made me laugh: Chloe correcting Lois' spelling...and that wieners line. Am I a bad person? Anyway, I loved the characters here. Thanks for sharing this!

ladydreamer June 9 2008, 19:27:09 UTC

Wow, thanks! Yeah, this was supposed to be more about Chloe, but it ended up about the Chlo-Lo and I think I'm glad it turned out that way.

No, you aren't a bad person for the weiners line. I put that in there on purpose :D

myownghost June 9 2008, 17:13:34 UTC

what a moving story! like the others, i like big-sister lois handling chloe so well. poor gabe.

ladydreamer June 9 2008, 19:24:23 UTC

Thank you very much. :D

simplytoopretty June 9 2008, 21:31:30 UTC

That was lovely.

I particularly loved the Chloe-Lois bond that you showed. Their relationship is awesome and I could easily seeing Lois attempting to take care of Chloe.

Taking a wild stab here and guessing that this is for tobywolf13's kidfic-a-thon. And if so, then this would be my prompt and you really did a fabulous job with the prompt.

ladydreamer June 9 2008, 22:39:44 UTC

That was yours! \o/ Yay! I was worried it might have strayed too far from what you'd had in mind. Thank you, and I'm glad you enjoyed it ♥

simplytoopretty June 9 2008, 23:29:57 UTC

I didn't really have anything in mind to be honest, but since I love angst and I love the Chloe-Lois cousin bond, your story was fantastic.

Hopefully you'll like your story (as in the story that uses your prompt).

cinderella81 June 10 2008, 01:04:28 UTC

OMG! I totally love this!! It is so bittersweet and cute and poignant ...

ladydreamer June 10 2008, 23:49:05 UTC

Hee. Thanks :)