Exchange Fic #22: Mobius

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Modnote: outinthestorm's fic was also written by one of our noble volunteers. Thank you, Mystery Pinch-Hitter! :)

The actual identity of the writer will remain secret until all the submissions are in and posted.

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Title: Mobius
Author: lady_rhiyana
Recipient: outinthestorm
Prompt: Details are everything. In the final confrontation scene of the Labyrinth, we see the clock for a

Comments

[wizzcat01]

I can always see Jareth as a warrior, someone that has a past, someone that knows about loss.

I like stories that add another layer to him and explain the way he acts. Beautiful imagery and very poignant, made even more so by Sarah having no memory of what she's just witnessed.

Very nicely done mystery pinch hitter! (and I have to admit, your use of Commonwealth spellings has completely thrown me with regard to your identity!) ;)

[lady_rhiyana]

Hee, I am an Australian - though after so long on the internet, I sometimes have to concentrate on my spelling.

[ex_misplace]

But still he could not change the past; what’s said is forever said, and what’s done is forever done.

Brilliant, poignant line.

I really enjoyed this glimpse into the Goblin King's mysterious past. It's still mysterious...and yet, like Wizz says, it adds a layer to him.

Incredibly well-written. The imagery (love the description of the battle) was superb. Fantastic job, Mystery Pinch-hitter!

[lady_rhiyana]

Thank you :) I like my Jareth to have a mysterious backstory, and the thought of limitations to his ability to meddle with time.

[arynwy]

That is such a tiny detail to spin a gripping moment from. I really, really like this and greedily with there was more.

[lady_rhiyana]

Thank you! It was a fascinating and very open prompt. If you're really looking for more, I have some more stuff featuring Young!Jareth in my drabble collection "Outlines and Oneshots" on ff.net. (My penname there is LadyRhiyana)

[moon_lover68]

Thats one of the great things about this Labyrinth fandom - how one little detail, a tiny image, can inspire so many stories. I really enjoyed this little side trip into Jareths history, even though the witness will remember nothing about it.

[lady_rhiyana]

Well, perhaps Sarah will relive brief flashes in her dreams? Actually, that could be quite interesting... No. *stomps burgeoning plot bunnies*

[outinthestorm]

Oh, this is fantastic, mystery pitch-hitter!
(and mystery original author - I hope I didn't scare you off with my prompts!!)
I'm glad you chose this prompt - I love that you managed to spin out such a small detail into a detailed backstory.
Heh - he was going to cheat and trap her anyway! Sneaky.
And it begs the question - his past self felt their presence and looked up at them - would he remember? Would it change it? Would Sarah being there change it for him? Questions, questions.
Thank you so much for such a thought provoking piece!

[outinthestorm]

I'm glad you liked it!

Thank you for your prompt - I've always been fascinated by Jareth-before-the-Labyrinth, and when you mentioned the clock turning *backwards*, well. I've read some very good stories where Jareth traps Sarah in a dream/time loop - why not turn that on its head?