[fanfic] armistice day
Title: armistice day
Fandom: Pokémon
Summary: He returns broken, and they dutifully give of themselves to repair him, erasing the borderlines they'd drawn.
Rating: R
Genre: Drama, Angst, Romance, Friendship, Hurt/Comfort.
Warnings: graphic sexual situations, language, self-harm, suicide.
( By the time he woke up, it was all over. )
While it's true that poké balls are designed to open upon hitting the ground, I don't think that they're made of strong enough material to withstand impact against a mountainside at a high enough velocity. I know this is game-fic and not anime-fic, but Ash and Gary broke a poké ball by just pulling at it. Granted, it was rusted, but there have been many instances where pokémon can just force themselves out of their poké balls (i.e Misty's psyduck and Jessie's wobuffet).
None of these prove my point entirely, but they do serve to show that they're a lot more fragile than we give them credit for. I'm not sure if it's the "they broke" or the "breaking the poké ball killed them instead of releasing them" part that you found to be unbelievable, but seeing as how there's no basis on which to qualify this (and there likely never will be - a franchise aimed at appealing to kids wouldn't include such risqué material - unless it's the manga), I think it's just based on each person's interpretation. So let's agree to disagree.
I agree with you 100% on Red being the most "violent" out of the trio. In retrospect, I should have included more of that. But like you said, this is a unique and unlikely situation that they're facing. On his own atop Mt. Silver, I think it's safe to say that Red takes most of his self-value from his pokémon, since they're the only significant contact he has, besides the few-and-far-between challengers. If they died... well, I think it'd be fair to say that he'd react... unexpectedly. I made him more "depressed" and "morose" because he's naturally not a communicator. Plus, he still feels guilty about how things turned out with Leaf and Green, so he's not going to lash out at them. So I chose to make him more withdrawn. He's always had problems expressing himself verbally, hence the violence. However, since his usual method of expressing himself (battling) is now unavailable to him because his pokémon, except Pikachu, are dead and he's been injured (thigh) so that he has a sort of limited mobility, I thought that violence would be unlikely, hence the drugs.
I originally wrote Leaf as a foil to Green. I wanted her to seem "perfect" and "flat" in Red's eyes, which would contrast to his doubts about Green. Therefore, when Leaf leaves after his suicide attempt and he and Green share that emotional moment, I just wanted it to be a shift in Red's perceptions of them. Leaf isn't perfect. I made her so flat so that I could show that Red's taking her for granted, in a way. That's why I limited the emotional moments involving Leaf to the end, when she returns with the egg. I see how this can be off-putting. In fact, after rereading, I think you're absolutely right. I should have included more significant moments with Leaf. I always like I do her a disservice in my Kanto OT3 pieces, either by not showcasing her enough or making her too flat. The good thing about you pointing this out though is that I can address these issues in my Big Bang fic. So thank you for pointing that out.
Thank you for your kind words there at the end. It was difficult for me to write. I didn't research depression, I just tapped into that part of myself, I guess.
Thanks again for reading and commenting!
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