SG-1 Fic: Closeted, by kuonji (NC-17)

[kuonji14]

Title: Closeted
Author: kuonji
Fandom: Stargate SG-1
Characters: Jack O'Neill, Daniel Jackson
Pairings: Daniel/male
Category: dark, PWP
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: non-con, bondage
Spoilers: none
Words: ~3630
Summary: He strokes himself and hums as he watches him eat. He'll give him a sponge bath tonight, as always. And oil his skin with vitamins and slick

Comments

[bunsdarien]

I kinda assumed for a minute, then was like nah' Daniel's stuck with some crazy man and jack's gonna rescue him any moment. Awesome story. Ya thinking of adding to it?

[kuonji14]

Oh, that's exactly the reaction and assumptions that I was hoping for. :D Thanks!

I think this is a nice, creepy place to end things, myself. I did sort of continue the story in my head, but it just wends away into Daniel getting away and Jack coming to his senses and then lots of angst on base and etc., stuff that had better to stay in my head rather than be inflicted on paper... :)

[helenkacan]

OMG

Is Jack fucked up or what? And faking an accident so that the human Daniel can disappear off the face of the earth, to be replaced by pet/slave Daniel.

The only thing that was a little confusing in reading (as it always is in slash) is deciding who he and his was referring to.

But, wow. Totally fucked up ... and so amazingly believable. Because your words were worth a thousand pictures!

Thanks for sharing,
H.

[kuonji14]

your words were worth a thousand pictures

Oh my, thanks for the enthusiastic and immensely ego-boosting comment! :D I'm really glad it caught you, and I'm super glad you found it believable.

Re: human vs pet/slave Daniel
Wow, that's a thought! A very interesting and shivery one. Thanks. ;)

Re: Him, His, and He
The confusion was, believe it or not, by design. So I'm glad you noticed it. :)

I liked how dropping all the proper nouns made the text ambiguous and disassociated, kind of like how I imagine it'd feel to be drugged or brainwashed or otherwise mentally compromised like Jack is. He's functioning, he's aware, but everything is just that little bit off. He realizes that he is this person called 'Jack' and his captive is named 'Daniel' (or 'Danny', as he calls him), but in his head (i.e. in the non-dialogue portion of narration) there are no such unique monikers. I also liked how it made everything that is Daniel's (food, body, emotions) his, meaning Jack's; it really gets the sense of possession through -- at least I hope it

[lucifrix]

I'm hanging here--I guessed it was Jack pretty early on, and I LOVE Evil!Jack. If you write more of this I'll make you cookies.

FYI--when you said "lathe" I assume you meant "lave." No offense. :)

[kuonji14]

No, of course I did mean that Daniel was cutting and shaping Jack's private parts with his tongue YIKES! Thanks so much for catching that! :D

Glad you liked this little version of Evil!Jack. :) I do enjoy dark versions of the characters, though I don't often get the inspiration to write them well. Also, thanks for letting me know you guessed it was Jack. I'm really interested in what people are thinking when they read. ;) Thanks!

[lucifrix]

Well, I figured it was Jack because I saw the "Jack/Daniel" in the "characters" list, and then when I started reading it nothing screamed "That can't be Jack!!" So your blurb might give it away to some people.

[kuonji14]

Ah, I see. Thanks! ;)

[tresa_cho]

Yea, I kind of knew it was Jack from the first line, but after a while of not saying his name I started to second-guess myself. What happened to Jack o.o

[kuonji14]

Oh, I was hoping for that reaction! Thanks. ;) As for what happened to Jack, well, I think the imagination is scarier than anything I could attempt to explain. :D Thanks for writing!

[batagur]

Coool! I liked this story a lot. Thanks for sharing it. :)

[kuonji14]

Thank you for writing! Glad you enjoyed. ;)