Before I erm, kind of spam you. Thank you for all of your hard work on the piece! I hope it wasn't too taxing and I'm glad that the prompts were okay! It's also fine that you mixed them, I didn't even think of it myself but I really enjoyed it as it is! (: I also hope that you're feeling better (considering your author's notes) and that everything is okay again. ^^
I adored it, loved every little piece of it because it just tore me apart. It really took me on an emotional roller coaster ride and at times I was pulling on my hair, others, clutching onto my chest, because don't hurt me like this, but wait a minute, actually do it. I did read over it twice before I decided that I could leave a coherent comment and I will be reading again because I'm certain that I can continue to pick things up.
The children whose voices were vague, unassuming, not in audible tone but rather a certain mental quality that only he seemed to be able to comprehend, these were the ones that made excellent classmates and acquaintances. But it was the ones
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And that was what scared him, the fact that when he sang, the empty piece of his chest, the part that he could never remember having been without, would throb in time with his breaths and feel like it was crawling out of his chest. What Yifan felt in contrast to Lu Han was different and I didn't think much of it at the time because a part of me was thinking that he was rejecting it rather than anything, but no... u___u
the melody creeping out of his chest with a dull kind of ache before he noticed and stuffed the sound back down into the dark where it belonged. But his need to suppress it is so strong. The description and the language just... it's all very dark and I felt bad because it doesn't seem pleasant and rather than a blessing, it's like a curse.
Yifan banished the thought, so used to the pain that he couldn't feel anything else. It's such a conditioned response, I had a moment and stepped back because it reiterated to me how badly he must have felt as a young child.
But he had absolutely no intention of going to the
( ... )
"You know what your father does, right?" I was half screaming no, because I remember the prompts. And although it was a prompt, I just couldn't because adaihowabn
he could hear the no hidden between her words, the don't do this echoing from the glass walls, the you have to let him go tucked into the lines of her lips. Aww, she was stuck between her role as a mother and a doctor and I just. It was heartbreaking and I can't say what's right/wrong in this verse but I was torn.
His father is such a prick. Like, he doesn't even have a tinge of care for his son who's going through a rough time. All I can hear from him are achievements and more achievements.
He wasn't shouting ... he knew he sounded scary. I have this impression of Yifan too, it's a pretty a strong one actually.
Lu Han, please don't apologise.
The empty space in his heart burst, a cold wet feeling running down the inside of his chest.This description left me cold. I just felt it
( ... )
I knew the moment that Yifan would sing, Lu Han would come alive. I really love soulmate!au and this was a really interesting take on it, but I did enjoy it a lot. Chrysanthemums are really pretty flowers and it was cool learning all the different meanings to it.
oMGF GOMG I NEED /clutches chest/ HOW DO YOU CRUSH SOMEOENS SOUL WIRH SUCH A BEAIUUTIFL IFC IM???????????? EVERTHINGH ABOUT THIS EAS SO ///EMOTIONAL/// FROM LUHANS DESEPRATION AND LONEOLYESS TO YOFANS PAIN AND I JSTU WANTED TO HOLD YIFAN SIOSOSOSO HARD DURIGN TRHE SEOCND PART BUT HE GOT HIS HAPPY ENDING THANK FUDGE HE FOD OR O RLLY OWULDNY HABE LIVED AND NAD NAD THE YYFIAN/BAEK FRIENDSHIP OT WAS HTE BEST THIGN AND JSUT HOW HE WAS THERE FOR YFAON THRU IT ALL im gonna go cry in a corner from how beautufl this whole thing was thamk you for shatring rhis masterpiece and nothing is as precious as you ;3
I have been hurt I can't do this :" This is so cute!!! <3 UwU I think something in me just broke... I'm glad the ending was happy otherwise I would've just andkekdnwoxne this is cute :"
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I adored it, loved every little piece of it because it just tore me apart. It really took me on an emotional roller coaster ride and at times I was pulling on my hair, others, clutching onto my chest, because don't hurt me like this, but wait a minute, actually do it. I did read over it twice before I decided that I could leave a coherent comment and I will be reading again because I'm certain that I can continue to pick things up.
The children whose voices were vague, unassuming, not in audible tone but rather a certain mental quality that only he seemed to be able to comprehend, these were the ones that made excellent classmates and acquaintances. But it was the ones ( ... )
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What Yifan felt in contrast to Lu Han was different and I didn't think much of it at the time because a part of me was thinking that he was rejecting it rather than anything, but no... u___u
the melody creeping out of his chest with a dull kind of ache before he noticed and stuffed the sound back down into the dark where it belonged.
But his need to suppress it is so strong. The description and the language just... it's all very dark and I felt bad because it doesn't seem pleasant and rather than a blessing, it's like a curse.
Yifan banished the thought, so used to the pain that he couldn't feel anything else.
It's such a conditioned response, I had a moment and stepped back because it reiterated to me how badly he must have felt as a young child.
But he had absolutely no intention of going to the ( ... )
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I was half screaming no, because I remember the prompts. And although it was a prompt, I just couldn't because adaihowabn
he could hear the no hidden between her words, the don't do this echoing from the glass walls, the you have to let him go tucked into the lines of her lips.
Aww, she was stuck between her role as a mother and a doctor and I just. It was heartbreaking and I can't say what's right/wrong in this verse but I was torn.
His father is such a prick. Like, he doesn't even have a tinge of care for his son who's going through a rough time. All I can hear from him are achievements and more achievements.
He wasn't shouting ... he knew he sounded scary.
I have this impression of Yifan too, it's a pretty a strong one actually.
Lu Han, please don't apologise.
The empty space in his heart burst, a cold wet feeling running down the inside of his chest.This description left me cold. I just felt it ( ... )
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Chrysanthemums are really pretty flowers and it was cool learning all the different meanings to it.
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AND NAD NAD THE YYFIAN/BAEK FRIENDSHIP OT WAS HTE BEST THIGN AND JSUT HOW HE WAS THERE FOR YFAON THRU IT ALL
im gonna go cry in a corner from how beautufl this whole thing was thamk you for shatring rhis masterpiece and nothing is as precious as you ;3
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I have been hurt I can't do this :"
This is so cute!!! <3 UwU I think something in me just broke... I'm glad the ending was happy otherwise I would've just andkekdnwoxne this is cute :"
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