dumps like a truck

[kreeton]

here's a poem I wrote just a little while ago. I haven't decided on a title yet but am considering something along the lines of "_____ berceuse". (I think I spelled that right. erm.)

anyway, on with the poetry now, ok?

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A lonely night again I spend

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truly beautiful...

[sunlit_shadows]

you capture all of your emotions perfectly...how it feels to long for someone like that. i especially liked

"I never wear a heavy enough coat." -such a great little detail

and
"My bed is too big for my desperate body.
Childishly, ridiculously,
I hug my pillow and kiss the air,
pretending it is you next to me;"

and

"the delivery room and deathbed of the airport"

so you are going to show it to him right? i think it would be really romantic if you hand-wrote it out in a letter and snail-mailed it. ^_~*

Re: truly beautiful...

[kreeton]

thanks, noel sweety!
sometimes I dork around with trying to write poems, but I usually don't like what I come up with, or abort halfway through. but something happened last night where I thought, oh gee, if I don't write this down in some way, I'll go *insane* and sob and sob and sob.
I sent it to him in his e-mail box but I haven't heard anything back yet...