aww i really liked it. I know you wrote it cause youve always spelled suppost, instead of supposed and nobody corrects you. There are a few small aspects id disagree over, but nice job i liked it a lot
wait i just need to clear something with one of the lines
i reread it and i was like that does not sound correct.
the life is not measured by the number of friends. i mean like the more friends you have compaired to some one else doesn't matter. friends do matter to me but i ment it as like i don't care that i may have more or less then other people.
friends rock is what im trying to say not the number of friends if that was the line u ment.
it was made to sound that life can be perfect if you let a lot go, but even nice people get hurt too and I know your poem is about people not being very materialistic and worrying, but if looked at in a more realistic point, those are just some things that if you got rid of you would be happier not things that would make your existence near perfect idk. Dont listen, I just looked at some parts a different way. You definitely can condense that paragraph, making it more simpler and coherent. Go for it
i see what you mean whoa total flash back from of mice and men lol.
yeah it did sound like i was trying to say life can be perfect
if anyone out there knows how please tell me would love to know lol
i have a problem with writing stuff the words dont come out right. i just have a hard time expressing myself with words but u seem to know what im trying to say. u deff got the point i was trying to make
omg that sweet sixteen show just really pissed me off. lol the girls are like well if he isn't giving me that million dollar gift he isn't invited anymore. it just really pissed me off how fucking spoiled they are.
i think simple plan really got what i was trying to say when they wrote welcome to my life.
I understand the point your trying to make, most especially cause I get the same way, I can just unload a bunch of thoughts but its hard to pull them together into coherence. Lol the 16 show pisses me off i saw 3 episodes and its just soo funny. "If I dont get that car they promised me, my birthday will be totally ruined and Ill never fogive them for ruining my birthday" Then they take her out to nice expeeeennsive restaurant and she just sits there crying the WHOLE time! Theyre giving her a fucking huge ass sweet 16 and thats what she gives them? and you know shes gonna get the car in the end anyway... Plus she snuck out to beverly hills or something and then when her parents get mad at her for going and spending a lot of money, they cancel her credit cards (shes 15 shes lucky she has one) and she makes the biggest fit like they did it for no reason. Oh well....
lmao!!! its so rediculous how much these girls have and then they think their life is hard. lol sometimes it surprizes me the shows that are out there. lol
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wut things don't u agree with?
wait i just need to clear something with one of the lines
i reread it and i was like that does not sound correct.
the life is not measured by the number of friends. i mean like the more friends you have compaired to some one else doesn't matter.
friends do matter to me but i ment it as like i don't care that i may have more or less then other people.
friends rock is what im trying to say not the number of friends if that was the line u ment.
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yeah it did sound like i was trying to say life can be perfect
if anyone out there knows how please tell me would love to know lol
i have a problem with writing stuff the words dont come out right. i just have a hard time expressing myself with words but u seem to know what im trying to say. u deff got the point i was trying to make
omg that sweet sixteen show just really pissed me off. lol the girls are like well if he isn't giving me that million dollar gift he isn't invited anymore. it just really pissed me off how fucking spoiled they are.
i think simple plan really got what i was trying to say when they wrote welcome to my life.
anyway im rambling on today
u deff saw the point i was trying to make.
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