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donut95 in kradam_ai

Dying Inside Part IV

Jul 09, 2009 09:19

Title: Dying Inside
Author: Legolas
Pairing: Kris/Adam
Rating: its nothing....
Warning: I forgot about the warning thing in my Part I post until someone reminded me....in the earlier part, a certain suicide action was involved.
Disclaimer: 100% fiction, all characters are fake and in no way related to any real life person...it's all in my head!

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author: donut95, rating: pg

Comments 7

adammlambert3 July 9 2009, 03:27:47 UTC

Very Good Story!

ex_warmfuzzi813 July 9 2009, 04:19:09 UTC

All caught up now!! *hint, hint*

xoxo

isolde13 July 9 2009, 04:36:50 UTC

Can I leave some constructive criticism?

Best thing you can do is to get a beta. You're doing really well considering English isn't your first language, but you've got some serious tense problems. I realize this is a peeve of mine, but it's just damn hard to read a story that switches from past tense to present tense constantly. A beta would catch that for you and any other grammatical errors that might be there.

As an author, I'm sure you're proud of your story and you want it to be as good as it can be.

If you don't know how to find a beta, let me know and I can point you in the right direction.

donut95 July 9 2009, 07:52:19 UTC

thanks for reading. have been really busy ..hence, i can't find the time to really sit down and write.
i also appreciate all ur comments and critiques.
isolde13 - what is this beta thing? would appreciate it if you can help. thanks...

isolde13 July 10 2009, 05:11:36 UTC

A beta is essentially a proofreader. They check your work for you - usually for grammatics and punctuation and spelling. And tense changes.

They can also, if you want them to, give you feedback on the actual story itself - does it have any continuity errors, is there a problem with a character, does the plot suck...that kind of thing.

Betas are people just like you and me - they will do all this out of the goodness of their heart for free. All you have to do is ask for someone to do it in one of the comms you belong to.

embaka July 9 2009, 19:35:37 UTC

love this story you are doing fine isolde13 is an excellent author i am sure any advice given is good

shiralyndee July 9 2009, 20:27:23 UTC

Please keep up the wonderful work. And thank you for letting us read it.