Fic: To Make You Feel My Love

[bornbeauty]

Comments

[shiralyndee]

Very, very nice!!!!!

[bornbeauty]

Thanks the first time I heard the song I felt like it just screamed Kradam so I couldn't resist

[asweetdownfall]

Your cut doesn't work, bb. :3

[bornbeauty]

Then could you please tell me one that will cause I just used the one on livejournal help

XOXO Kendall Y

[asweetdownfall]

I think you could add <*/lj-cut> (take out the asterisk) after "I love you, too" and it should work. =)

[bornbeauty]

it's not working

[emmuzka]

Sweetheart, that wasn't very good. First of all, check your tenses. They change from present to imperfect and back to present again. Also, putting the lyrics in the characters' mouth makes this fic feel really campy. And you should never make grown male characters cry in the first few paragraphs, it is not believable. If you want to show emotions so high that crying is in order, you'll have to build it up and make it more realistic, otherwise it will end up campy.

[bornbeauty]

Well I've never written a fic before and honestly if you don't like it don't read it

[emmuzka]

the "don't like, then don't read it"-argument is invalid when posting a fic in a fic community is an equivalent to showing it to my face. Of course I start to read it.

Do you think that it is not disrespectful to post fic with errors in basic grammar? Do you think it is okay?

[bornbeauty]

Watever and
Besides a few grammer errors never hurt anyone do hoe is it disrespectful

[kradam_lover]

This was perfect! Great use of the song!