First of all, wow. I absolutely love the last scene with Min when Jia completely freaks out and runs away.
Secondly, I love your writing style in this. In the beginning, the writing style is very like Alice in Wonderland -- very posh and polished and very English. That was the first thing I picked up on, and I really, really liked it, because it really suit the fic. I also like the plot itself -- I don't know the actual story very well so it was really nice to have little surprises with Min sticking around for the whole story and not just a brief glimpse at the beginning, and the scene on Min's bed. You can really feel Jia's admiration and love of Min at that moment.
As it went on, I loved the pacing. The pacing for long-fics are always pretty consistent and not as rushed as shorter fics, which is awesome. I don't know Miss A at all so I can't comment on characterisation, but I really, really love Min. She's such a child at heart, wanting everything to be perfect and hers, while Jia is more just along for the ride, following Min wherever because without Min, she'd be lost.
When Jia began fighting against Min (with Humpty Dumpty, when she first sees the White Queen) and when her view of Min and Wonderland starts changing, it got really, really interesting. You have like two opposing views of Wonderland, and also of like their opposing personalities -- Min completely at ease with having no idea with what's happening and Jia being completely uncomfortable. I think it's kind of ironic that only when Jia's familiar enough with Wonderland that she ends up leaving -- I mean, it might've been her subconscious telling her to run back to Min's room because she wants to go back to the time when they laid on that bed the first time and how great it felt.
I really can't sum up how simply awesome this fic is and how much I enjoyed it, but author, you should be very proud of yourself :) ♥
Oh my god this is an incredible comment thank you so much!!!♥♥♥ (Quite honestly I was terrified of my own writing style in this, so it's amazing to hear that you liked it so much.) I honestly, really honestly don't know what else to say except a thousand times thank you and that your analysis is really amazing, of everything and everyone and spot-on and definitely more in-depth than I intended it to be. Just, thank you for reading and enjoying and leaving this fantastically amazing comment that seriously makes me happier than anything else. ♥♥♥♥♥
Secondly, I love your writing style in this. In the beginning, the writing style is very like Alice in Wonderland -- very posh and polished and very English. That was the first thing I picked up on, and I really, really liked it, because it really suit the fic. I also like the plot itself -- I don't know the actual story very well so it was really nice to have little surprises with Min sticking around for the whole story and not just a brief glimpse at the beginning, and the scene on Min's bed. You can really feel Jia's admiration and love of Min at that moment.
As it went on, I loved the pacing. The pacing for long-fics are always pretty consistent and not as rushed as shorter fics, which is awesome. I don't know Miss A at all so I can't comment on characterisation, but I really, really love Min. She's such a child at heart, wanting everything to be perfect and hers, while Jia is more just along for the ride, following Min wherever because without Min, she'd be lost.
When Jia began fighting against Min (with Humpty Dumpty, when she first sees the White Queen) and when her view of Min and Wonderland starts changing, it got really, really interesting. You have like two opposing views of Wonderland, and also of like their opposing personalities -- Min completely at ease with having no idea with what's happening and Jia being completely uncomfortable. I think it's kind of ironic that only when Jia's familiar enough with Wonderland that she ends up leaving -- I mean, it might've been her subconscious telling her to run back to Min's room because she wants to go back to the time when they laid on that bed the first time and how great it felt.
I really can't sum up how simply awesome this fic is and how much I enjoyed it, but author, you should be very proud of yourself :) ♥
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