Comments | koutenki: take me to paradise

douc in koutenki

take me to paradise

Jan 27, 2013 21:52

take me to paradise
~ 3,550 w, pg-13, (nana/jaejoong)
it feels like the long-overdue ending of her romance story, only it’s not the happily ever after every girl has been wishing for.

■ in response to silentlybelieve "in fairy tales, when the mask came off, the handsome prince still loved the girl, no matter what - and that alone turned her into a princess ( Read more... )

Ξ : douc, fandom: dbsk, ♥ : nana/jaejoong, fandom: after school

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douc January 26 2013, 13:54:49 UTC

spot for harues

harues January 26 2013, 17:19:50 UTC

I DON'T WANT TO LIVE ON THIS EARTH ANYMORE TOO MANY FEELS

harues January 26 2013, 17:36:19 UTC

Jaejoong grin widens. “Then what? Got a fear for the doorknobs” he question, eyebrow arches minutely, a tiny gesture that reveals his amusement. “They don’t bite, just so you know.” #ACTUALTEARSONTHEFLOOR

When he steps foot out of the taxi, the first thing he sees is her picture and knows she’s the only thing in this town yet to be wrecked by life.

On a Sunday morning, two men under government duty enters room 359 of Hotel Savoy and finds two lifeless bodies lying side by side on the bed, hands almost touching.

I DON'T WANT THIS LIFE ANYMORE, YURI. I DON'T WANT IT.

harues January 26 2013, 17:39:22 UTC

Okay, now for my actual commentary - first to begin with, I love you, Yuri, you are a slice of heaven and an angel. I love how subtly soft this all is but the anxiety is crushing it all underneath you and YOU JUST. DON'T WANT IT EVER TO END.

It's gorgeous, everything, it really is. My heart broke with the last few lines.

It's cliché BUT I LOVE IT. It's going into my faves list.

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douc January 26 2013, 13:55:15 UTC

spot for uljima

uljima January 27 2013, 01:14:01 UTC

OH MY GOD THE ENDING?
YURI YOU DESTROYED ME.

i actually adore princess stories, and this whole thing was beautiful and heart wrecking. i could feel the tension between the somewhat soft description of the scenes and i was "ksdjhdfkjdf"-ing the whole time. IT'S AMAZING. YOU ARE WONDERFUL. and i don't mind clichés at all.

douc January 27 2013, 05:36:28 UTC

YOU'RE WONDERFUL AND AMAZING SO GO WRITE SOME WONDERFUL AND AMAZING JAENANA
I love princess stories, it's so cliche but it's so fun to read/write
thank you for your kind words, gee ♥

kurdoodle January 26 2013, 23:21:37 UTC

WOW I REALLY LIKE THIS?!?! i have never heard of the pairing jaenana but WOW actually they would look very good together ;_; omg THE PLOT, THE ENDING, eeeverything was perfection ♥

douc January 27 2013, 05:34:59 UTC

JUMP INTO THIS SHIP WITH ME!
ikr! they would make the prettiest babies ever ♥
awww thank you, you're so sweet!

wintercreamed January 27 2013, 00:48:28 UTC

No matter how much I ship luhan/nana I still vote for this fic in every way and the ending just... ended the life of me sobs will you not write perfection for once I feel so insecure. It's a good read and I love how you maintain consistency in pacing; which is what I admire most in your fics and I love your style cries. It's not THAT cliche, come on, we need cliche once in our lives; besides who doesn't like a runaway princess hiding in hotels with some gorgeous guy huh it still sounds awesome.
/ADDS TO FAVES/

douc January 27 2013, 05:32:07 UTC

will YOU not write perfection for once???
ikr! everyone loves a runaway princess and ship any nana pairing tbh, she's too pretty not ship with everyone lol

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douc January 27 2013, 05:31:04 UTC

yeah, didn't seem right to send her back as a princess or let them run off tgt so I settle for that ending

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douc February 24 2013, 11:08:37 UTC

I am so sorry for the late reply, I didn't see this until now
lol yeah, if it ended that way, it would be a rip-off of roman holiday basically lol
agreed, happy ending for angst doesn't really grip you.
I might, I might, if you have any request or prompts or just whatever then leave it here cause I'm lacking inspiration