Wolfram fanfiction contest entry

[vivarina]

Title: One Sleepless Night
Author: vivarina
Prompt: Lullaby
Pairings: Mainly Wolf/Yuu, slight Mura/Wolf
Rating: G
Warning: No real lullaby, ‘lullaby’ is more of a metaphor. Set after Conrad's betrayal arc, assuming everything is back to normal.
Entirely from Yuuri's point of view. His thoughts are in italics.
Summary: An insight into Yuuri's thoughts on a

Comments

[alariel85]

It must be the sheep counting having a delayed effect……

....Yuuri you idiot *headpalm*

Cute fic, love it ^^ i always loved fics with MuraWolf implications X)

[vivarina]

Thank you, I love fics with MuraWolf implications too XDD
I'm glad you liked ^^

[lenainverse]

Thanks for entering the contest! I like your use of the prompt very much. &hearts

I thought Yuuri and Wolfram were very in character, and from what I've read of the novels via your translations it seems very much like Yuuri's train of thought. It's sort of rambling and not really sure what he means, just like Yuuri. Very well done. ^_^

The one piece of concrit I can offer is that the overuse of ellipses ("...") is kind of distracting. I understand the use of them as far as Yuuri's thoughts not being exact sentences, but in the dialogue especially it seemed a bit much. I overuse ellipses a lot too and I understand the inclination, believe me, but the more people point it out to me the more I realize that a period ending a statement can be just as effective. ^_^

[vivarina]

Thank you for your compliments! I had a really tough time trying to keep Yuuri and Wolfram in character, I kept re-editing sentences over and over till I got a minor headache XD

Thank you especially for your advice about the ellipses. Now that you've pointed it out to me, I do see your point about them. I'll definitely keep that in mind if I write anymore fanfics in the future ^_^

[acumen210]

I like this fic^^ I'm glad you posted this. I didn't know there were as much Mura/Wolf fans here.

[vivarina]

I'm glad you liked it ^_^

[dokisoradoki]

Everyone was nicely written in character, especially Yuuri~ ♥
The MuraWolf implications fit in well too. :3

Good luck with the contest! ^^

[vivarina]

Thank you! I loved writing from Yuuri's point of view, as he can be so funny sometimes XD
And thanks too for your well-wishes ^_^

[tiam_atardecer]

=) I'm glad you entered the contest. I really like a lot your fic. After reading your translations, I really really can see Yuuri thinking all of that.
And it's so sweet Yuuri cannot sleep until Wolf comes to the room. So sweet. I think the prompt was okay =), and also you can relate it a bit with Wolfram's soft snoring.

[vivarina]

I'm so glad you liked it, I tried my best to imagine what Yuuri would think in his situation XDD
Thank you for reading it ^_^