Comments | kitfallen: Did I Mention part 1: Things You Don't Do

kitfallen

Did I Mention part 1: Things You Don't Do

Feb 04, 2009 16:16

Title: Things You Don’t Do
Genre: The World Ends With You
Rating: PG
Pairings: Eri/Shiki, Joshua/Neku
Summary: There were a lot of things that Eri had to learn not to do when she became friends with all of them.

( Eri sometimes felt like an outsider. )

twewy: eri/shiki, fanfic, twewy: josh/neku, twewy: did i mention, fanfic: the world ends with you, rating: pg

Comments 31

nice :) leefdoor February 4 2009, 22:00:07 UTC

Nice, :D:D:D. Good writing and the effect the game had on everyone is pretty clear. I like it, most fics don't show that at all. To me it's like the kind of story that should continue but with every chappie someone else who does the talking... Beat, Rhyme, Neku Shiki, Josh... Just an idea :). I think it's a cool universe and I kinda wanna know what happens next, from more then one viewpoin... so can you? Please?

Just thought I'd ask cause u never know :)

Re: nice :) kitfallen February 5 2009, 18:22:10 UTC

I have a problem with not showing psychological trauma. I think the 'scars' they all have would be a good reason for people not to remember the Game at all. However, I think that they are a special case and so are left with their scars, which the upper levels probably hope will fade in time.

That's a brilliant idea. I wish I had more to write for this plot.. I suppose I could come up with something--although I have to say Beat's chapter would be hard to do without screwing up his mindset entirely...

I'm actually already planning/writing a Joshua-pov parallel of this story.. >_>; then adding on more to the plot, so maybe I'll just do the same each time. I do love multiple-narrated stories..

thetg February 4 2009, 22:09:34 UTC

I love this immensely. <3

All of the little paralellisms carried over from the game were a very nice touch, and seeing Eri's point of view on all of them is just... fff I love it.

That and this comm NEEDS MORE FEMMESLASH *cough* What?

I love your style, I hope that you continue posting~

kitfallen February 5 2009, 18:25:19 UTC

<3

It's amusing me that a decent amount of Josh/Neku fic has Eri/Shiki in the background.. but I have yet to see many with it in the foreground. It's a rather obvious pairing. (Before I even started the game, I was reading the back and looked up at my friend and said "She's totally gay, isn't she?", my friend sputtered a bit and then finally said "...Yes.. a bit." It was rather hilarious.)

I'm writing a Joshua-pov parallel to this story.. so it might evolve even more once the plot unfolds in my head.

mirrankei February 4 2009, 23:04:41 UTC

I loved this, and I agree with leefdor: it definitely needs a sequel. I love how afraid everyone is of Josh, even when Neku accepts him kind of.

Also, both my favorite couples! :D

kitfallen February 5 2009, 23:31:32 UTC

Rhyme also sort of accepts him, but I didn't get to say much about that as Beat would make up for Rhyme's lack of fright anyway.

I'm already writing a parallel of this story in Josh's pov, but if the plot evolves enough then I'll probably take her advice and try for different characters each chapter. :3

Yay, they're my favorites too. :3

mirrankei February 6 2009, 00:50:24 UTC

Oh, that's just awesome. I can't wait! <3

fyretoppaaa February 4 2009, 23:45:45 UTC

Oooooo. Fascinating take, especially since it's from Eri's point of view. I love that she could see Joshua in a way the others couldn't--or so it seems. I love that you could pinpoint the little quirks and scars left on each of them by the Reaper's Game through her eyes.

Awesome writing, awesome concept, awesome fic. |D I wouldn't be averse to a sequel either.

kitfallen February 5 2009, 23:36:18 UTC

Oh that's exactly how I meant it. Eri can see Joshua in a way the others don't and perhaps that's good, but it also could be taken to say that she's missing something that the others are already aware of. Personally I'd say both are true. Eri seems like the type of person to have a huge heart, and so she would be the kind of person to see these scars and want to help, regardless of reason.

Lol, good thing I'm sort of writing one then >_>;

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kitfallen February 5 2009, 23:38:59 UTC

<3

I love Shiki and Eri, they're sort of bubble-headed, but you can see that there's a deep person with a large heart under all that. I've always seen Eri as the sort to have a huge heart and want to help people, but also to have a large ego about herself and a deep passion for her friends.

I definitely want to write more about them now. :3