I liked that John showed some hints of being a good father in this chapter. I didn’t want to smack him around quite as much here as I did in the last installment. *g*
I also liked that there’s probably more to Hall than what we thought in the previous chapter, that he’s not just some psycho hunter killing fae for sport.
Favorite lines:
Here, there’s relief from the summer heat. Cool, crisp air circulates near the forest floor, damp earth fighting against the humidity, evaporating into a blanketing mist. Sound is dampened, muffled against rotting leaves and fallen twigs, captured between close trees. Above, where healthy green leaves rustle in the June breeze, birds chirp. Animals move. A thud sounds here and there as smaller creatures leap from tree to tree.
Great paragraph there. Lovely description. It really helps set the mood.
Estrella rushing away, as if pulled by a string at her back. The room pulls with her until it turns green, gold, silver, blacks against bright glows.
Good description here, too, in both sentences.
"They tricked you into drinking of our world, pet. Do you feel it when you stay away too long?"
Dean hesitates. "Yes."
Poor Dean. *hugs Dean*
"It will kill you unless they remove it. It will be hard.”
He just can’t get a break, can he? He’s already been through so much, and he’s going to have to endure so much more … *sneaks Dean away for some TLC*
Putting his son somewhere safe, where he could be properly looked after, would only save him physically. Such a move, seen as abandonment by the overly-attached Dean would kill him in spirit -- John’s sure of that. Experiencing the death of his mother at such a young, impressionable age made Dean petrified of not only becoming attached to anyone, but of those he did leaving him.
I really like how you wrote that paragraph, the insight you provide into Dean’s psyche. Even as an adult, Dean’s extremely wrapped up in his family, not only in terms of his emotions, but also his self-worth. It makes for such lovely angst.
*laughs* I'm glad John's not getting smacked around this time. I do try to make him a nice guy at times, but he's just so damn stubborn and contridictory. *growls*
I liked that John showed some hints of being a good father in this chapter. I didn’t want to smack him around quite as much here as I did in the last installment. *g*
I also liked that there’s probably more to Hall than what we thought in the previous chapter, that he’s not just some psycho hunter killing fae for sport.
Favorite lines:
Here, there’s relief from the summer heat. Cool, crisp air circulates near the forest floor, damp earth fighting against the humidity, evaporating into a blanketing mist. Sound is dampened, muffled against rotting leaves and fallen twigs, captured between close trees. Above, where healthy green leaves rustle in the June breeze, birds chirp. Animals move. A thud sounds here and there as smaller creatures leap from tree to tree.
Great paragraph there. Lovely description. It really helps set the mood.
Estrella rushing away, as if pulled by a string at her back. The room pulls with her until it turns green, gold, silver, blacks against bright glows.
Good description here, too, in both sentences.
"They tricked you into drinking of our world, pet. Do you feel it when you stay away too long?"
Dean hesitates. "Yes."
Poor Dean. *hugs Dean*
"It will kill you unless they remove it. It will be hard.”
He just can’t get a break, can he? He’s already been through so much, and he’s going to have to endure so much more … *sneaks Dean away for some TLC*
Putting his son somewhere safe, where he could be properly looked after, would only save him physically. Such a move, seen as abandonment by the overly-attached Dean would kill him in spirit -- John’s sure of that. Experiencing the death of his mother at such a young, impressionable age made Dean petrified of not only becoming attached to anyone, but of those he did leaving him.
I really like how you wrote that paragraph, the insight you provide into Dean’s psyche. Even as an adult, Dean’s extremely wrapped up in his family, not only in terms of his emotions, but also his self-worth. It makes for such lovely angst.
Looking forward, as always, to more. :)
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