Legacy Spork
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From Amazon.com
Legacy
In an award-winning YA fantasy debut, 16-year-old novelist Cayla Kluver brings a magical touch to an unrelentingly suspenseful coming-of-age tale. Duty-bound to wed her father’s choice in successor to the throne, Princess Alera of Hytanica believes that she is being forced into the worst of all possible fates-a marriage to the arrogant and hot-tempered suitor, Steldor. When a mysterious boy from enemy Cokyri appears bearing secrets and an entirely different view of what's appropriate behavior for a young lady, Alera learns that her private desires threaten to destroy the kingdom. When Narian’s shocking past comes to light, Alera finds herself in a shadowy world of palace intrigue and ancient blood feuds, facing an uncertain future with dwindling options-and must learn to decide between right and wrong all alone. Marked by witty, rapid-fire dialogue and dramatic complexity that belie the writer’s age, Legacy brings a fresh, new sensibility to age-old questions of duty and inheritance and to a young heroine’s quest to find her true voice.
Ah! We have an arranged marriage! And a Mysterious Boy who offers Another Way of doing things. Sadly, I don't actually have the book so I can't say if it is that she can do/marry who she wants to do than what her father wants her to do. Too bad, that's what I would guess it was. Also who is this "Narian" with a shocking past? Is he the Mysterious Boy or someone else? Why does she have to learn "to decide between right and wrong" by herself? Isn't that something we learn how to do with the help of people around us? I mean if people in books actually talked to other people a lot of things might actually get done instead of causing havoc and misunderstandings. (Robert Jordan, I'm looking at you there!)
For once I'd like to see a story that starts out after the princess has married the guy she was arranged to marry and what happens then.
... go away bunny. SHOO.
SHOOOOO...
Damnitall.
The first boy disappeared on the day of his birth, on a night when the pale yellow moon that ruled the sky turned red and bathed the heavens in the ghastly color of blood, the same night the Kingdom of Cokyri abruptly ceased its merciless attack.
For starters I keep on hearing "Corkey" when ever I read that. I suppose I shouldn't be too mean about names, God only knows what someone will do to my names, but still.
Okay. So, we have an infant boy vanishing. How? Were they stolen? Poofed away in a shower of sparkles? Large mobs? The cats got hungry? This is an important detail. Just disappearing isn't enough. The method of the vanishing is important to set the tone of what we as the readers should feel. If it was stolen by human means I'm going to feel a lot different about it than if it was poofed away by a goblin or run off with by the Wild Hunt. Right now I have nothing. I have no connection to this baby boy. I'm just being told this.
The description of the moon and the light. I can't see the night sky turning blood red. I'm sorry, that's a bit too much light for me. I could see the day sky doing that but not the night sky. I can see the blood red moon casting the ground in red just like it does silver, but not the sky.
Finally, who is Coryri attacking so mercilessly? And which side was the kid stolen from?
Across the land of Hytanica, in the villages, infant boys continued to vanish. The King turned a blind eye somewhat foolishly, seeking no explanation, needing to refortify his Kingdom’s defenses for fear that Cokyri would resume its brutal onslaught. He was finally forced to take notice when children inside the city’s walls began to disappear. A count was made of the number missing, but before the King could determine what action should be taken, the disappearances stopped as suddenly as they had begun. The last Hytanican child to vanish was the newborn son of a wealthy baron and baroness.
HOOOOOW were they vanishing!! What was the common denominator that chose one boy or the other? What time of day they were born? What color hair they had? How many siblings? How are the people reacting to it? Is there a brisk market of anti-theft wards showing up? Is there more patrols sent out? Witch hunts? Are people clamoring at the king banging on his castle gates for him to protect them? I would say why does it matter who the last kid belonged to was important but he's probably the Mystery Child.
Within the week, as the bleeding moon waned, the decomposing bodies of the infants were found outside the gates of the city, a final word from the greatest enemy Hytanica had ever known. Grieving parents collected the rotting bodies of their sons, but there was one mystery that would for many years remain unsolved. Forty-nine babies were taken, but only forty-eight bodies were returned.
This is probably very morbid of me, but all I can think of is "how did they know which kid was theirs?" I mean babies are hard enough to tell apart as it is (hence all those switched at birth stories) but rotting babies? There's no way to know which parent lost out on their kid, especially if they all show up (SOMEHOW) all at once at the gates. Unless the kids all had name tags on, but I would think that would be something worth mentioning. Of course how the kids Bamfed wasn't worth mentioning, so what do I know?
No one knew why the Cokyrians had withdrawn from the land or why they had not been able to destroy Hytanica and her people. The Cokyrians were superior to the Hytanicans as fighters and strategists, and did not adhere to any code of honor in war, but still Hytanica had not fallen. Some thought the Cokyrians had abandoned the effort out of frustration, for they had many times been poised to win; others thought the Cokyrian rulers had finally come to believe the ancient story of Hytanica’s conception.
Yeah, but what about all the dead babies? DUDE FORTY-NINE BABIES WERE STOLEN BY STRANGE AND MYSTERIOUS MEANS!!! WHO CARES ABOUT THE CORKIES UNLESS THEY HAD SOMETHING TO DO WITH IT!! Hell, why didn't they have spies to let them know why the Corkies retreated? Why didn't the people of Hytanica demand retribution from the Corkies for their dead and mysteriously stolen children?
According to lore, the first King of Hytanica, seeking to protect his foundling home, had been advised by his priests that a sacrifice of blood both royal and innocent would hallow the ground and make his Kingdom invincible. After much soul-searching, the King had taken the life of his own infant son, and placed drops of the boy’s blood at each corner of the land to forever shield the people he loved.
I kinda like that. It's creepy. I wonder if it would come up later in the story. I hope so. Maybe she has to decide if she wants to sacrifice her infant son? Oh wait, that would require her to get married... and the book appears to be about her trying to find the right guy. Priests of what though?
I was born shortly before the end of the war, a Princess of Hytanica, my father’s first heir. As my people settled into a long-awaited time of peace, and learned again how to lead normal lives, I was brought before them and grew to be a young woman, living in freedom such as the war-torn generations before me had never known.
All such things must come to an end, however, and that is where my story begins.
Yeah, but what about the dead babies? You've got mysteriously vanishing dead babies and i want to listen to you why? What do you have to do with the dead babies? A hint would be nice.
I WANT DEAD BABIES!!
From Amazon.com
Legacy
In an award-winning YA fantasy debut, 16-year-old novelist Cayla Kluver brings a magical touch to an unrelentingly suspenseful coming-of-age tale. Duty-bound to wed her father’s choice in successor to the throne, Princess Alera of Hytanica believes that she is being forced into the worst of all possible fates-a marriage to the arrogant and hot-tempered suitor, Steldor. When a mysterious boy from enemy Cokyri appears bearing secrets and an entirely different view of what's appropriate behavior for a young lady, Alera learns that her private desires threaten to destroy the kingdom. When Narian’s shocking past comes to light, Alera finds herself in a shadowy world of palace intrigue and ancient blood feuds, facing an uncertain future with dwindling options-and must learn to decide between right and wrong all alone. Marked by witty, rapid-fire dialogue and dramatic complexity that belie the writer’s age, Legacy brings a fresh, new sensibility to age-old questions of duty and inheritance and to a young heroine’s quest to find her true voice.
Ah! We have an arranged marriage! And a Mysterious Boy who offers Another Way of doing things. Sadly, I don't actually have the book so I can't say if it is that she can do/marry who she wants to do than what her father wants her to do. Too bad, that's what I would guess it was. Also who is this "Narian" with a shocking past? Is he the Mysterious Boy or someone else? Why does she have to learn "to decide between right and wrong" by herself? Isn't that something we learn how to do with the help of people around us? I mean if people in books actually talked to other people a lot of things might actually get done instead of causing havoc and misunderstandings. (Robert Jordan, I'm looking at you there!)
For once I'd like to see a story that starts out after the princess has married the guy she was arranged to marry and what happens then.
... go away bunny. SHOO.
SHOOOOO...
Damnitall.
The first boy disappeared on the day of his birth, on a night when the pale yellow moon that ruled the sky turned red and bathed the heavens in the ghastly color of blood, the same night the Kingdom of Cokyri abruptly ceased its merciless attack.
For starters I keep on hearing "Corkey" when ever I read that. I suppose I shouldn't be too mean about names, God only knows what someone will do to my names, but still.
Okay. So, we have an infant boy vanishing. How? Were they stolen? Poofed away in a shower of sparkles? Large mobs? The cats got hungry? This is an important detail. Just disappearing isn't enough. The method of the vanishing is important to set the tone of what we as the readers should feel. If it was stolen by human means I'm going to feel a lot different about it than if it was poofed away by a goblin or run off with by the Wild Hunt. Right now I have nothing. I have no connection to this baby boy. I'm just being told this.
The description of the moon and the light. I can't see the night sky turning blood red. I'm sorry, that's a bit too much light for me. I could see the day sky doing that but not the night sky. I can see the blood red moon casting the ground in red just like it does silver, but not the sky.
Finally, who is Coryri attacking so mercilessly? And which side was the kid stolen from?
Across the land of Hytanica, in the villages, infant boys continued to vanish. The King turned a blind eye somewhat foolishly, seeking no explanation, needing to refortify his Kingdom’s defenses for fear that Cokyri would resume its brutal onslaught. He was finally forced to take notice when children inside the city’s walls began to disappear. A count was made of the number missing, but before the King could determine what action should be taken, the disappearances stopped as suddenly as they had begun. The last Hytanican child to vanish was the newborn son of a wealthy baron and baroness.
HOOOOOW were they vanishing!! What was the common denominator that chose one boy or the other? What time of day they were born? What color hair they had? How many siblings? How are the people reacting to it? Is there a brisk market of anti-theft wards showing up? Is there more patrols sent out? Witch hunts? Are people clamoring at the king banging on his castle gates for him to protect them? I would say why does it matter who the last kid belonged to was important but he's probably the Mystery Child.
Within the week, as the bleeding moon waned, the decomposing bodies of the infants were found outside the gates of the city, a final word from the greatest enemy Hytanica had ever known. Grieving parents collected the rotting bodies of their sons, but there was one mystery that would for many years remain unsolved. Forty-nine babies were taken, but only forty-eight bodies were returned.
This is probably very morbid of me, but all I can think of is "how did they know which kid was theirs?" I mean babies are hard enough to tell apart as it is (hence all those switched at birth stories) but rotting babies? There's no way to know which parent lost out on their kid, especially if they all show up (SOMEHOW) all at once at the gates. Unless the kids all had name tags on, but I would think that would be something worth mentioning. Of course how the kids Bamfed wasn't worth mentioning, so what do I know?
No one knew why the Cokyrians had withdrawn from the land or why they had not been able to destroy Hytanica and her people. The Cokyrians were superior to the Hytanicans as fighters and strategists, and did not adhere to any code of honor in war, but still Hytanica had not fallen. Some thought the Cokyrians had abandoned the effort out of frustration, for they had many times been poised to win; others thought the Cokyrian rulers had finally come to believe the ancient story of Hytanica’s conception.
Yeah, but what about all the dead babies? DUDE FORTY-NINE BABIES WERE STOLEN BY STRANGE AND MYSTERIOUS MEANS!!! WHO CARES ABOUT THE CORKIES UNLESS THEY HAD SOMETHING TO DO WITH IT!! Hell, why didn't they have spies to let them know why the Corkies retreated? Why didn't the people of Hytanica demand retribution from the Corkies for their dead and mysteriously stolen children?
According to lore, the first King of Hytanica, seeking to protect his foundling home, had been advised by his priests that a sacrifice of blood both royal and innocent would hallow the ground and make his Kingdom invincible. After much soul-searching, the King had taken the life of his own infant son, and placed drops of the boy’s blood at each corner of the land to forever shield the people he loved.
I kinda like that. It's creepy. I wonder if it would come up later in the story. I hope so. Maybe she has to decide if she wants to sacrifice her infant son? Oh wait, that would require her to get married... and the book appears to be about her trying to find the right guy. Priests of what though?
I was born shortly before the end of the war, a Princess of Hytanica, my father’s first heir. As my people settled into a long-awaited time of peace, and learned again how to lead normal lives, I was brought before them and grew to be a young woman, living in freedom such as the war-torn generations before me had never known.
All such things must come to an end, however, and that is where my story begins.
Yeah, but what about the dead babies? You've got mysteriously vanishing dead babies and i want to listen to you why? What do you have to do with the dead babies? A hint would be nice.
I WANT DEAD BABIES!!