this is a thought experiment

[kindkit]

I have fic! Um, CSI fic. (*looks hopefully at the two people on the flist who care about CSI*)

Title: This Is A Thought Experiment
Pairing: Warrick/Nick
Rating: PG-13
Summary: What happens after Schrodinger's cat gets out of the box?
Notes: Set after "Grave Danger."
More notes: This is a present for 47_trek_47, who wanted hurt/comfort fic in the pairing.

Comments

[kindkit]

I personally read Nick as either straightstraightstraight or so far back in the closet his grandmother couldn't find him looking for her shoes

I tend to agree (also, I love your phrasing!); the pairing is a tricky one. What I tried to do here was suggest that after such an extreme event, both Nick's and Warrick's sense of themselves could be so shaken that they become open to new possibilities. And that also they've both become much more aware of what they mean to each other.

Still, I see what you're saying. I very nearly ended the story with Warrick's question about the kiss unanswered. But ultimately, I wanted Nick to be willing to take that chance. Nick's feelings--the aftereffects of the trauma and how he feels his whole identity has been disrupted--should perhaps have been emphasized more, but I was afraid that having him talk about his feelings a lot would be out of character. (Damn Nick for being such a guy.)

I really like how you've structured this story: not how traumatized Nick is by what happened to him, but how

[47_trek_47]

but it was something I wanted desperately to include.

Hee. Poor kindkit and her terribly demanding friends. *cough*me*cough*

[kindkit]

Thank you so much. I'm especially glad to hear that the characterization worked, since I'm new to this fandom.

I hope there may be more?

I really don't know. Probably not more of this particular story, but maybe more CSI fic eventually.

[47_trek_47]

leaving a scaly, topographic crust

Love this imagry. Very striking, and I can picture exactly what you mean.

Alcohol interacts with corticosteroids and antihistamines, and Nick's probably been prescribed both. Those are low-risk interactions, though. Warrick doesn't think there's been a documented fatality from either one.

This is deliciously CSI-y.

somebody pulling an Ocean's Eleven at the Mirage.

Oh, I have so much love for this line. So much. Heeee.

(it was just a coin's flip from being him, just a draft of air or a pinch of grit on the quarter's edge)

Mmm, Chaos. Lovely line.

Also love the whole bit right after Nick wakes up, the part with the sleep paralysis and the vocabulary of 60,000 words, but it is too long to quote...

"Did I live? Cause I feel like I died. Like I lost myself and came back as somebody else."

I think this line is particularly Nick-y. I can hear him saying it.

"did you just call me 'baby' a minute ago?" Something like amusement in his voice, and something else, too, quiet and strangeHee. Thank you

[kindkit]

I'm so glad you liked it!

[venus_blue]

I agree with Dawnie, I would love to see more CSI. Your characterization, and just...it's lovely. And I'm extraordinarily picky about reading CSI fic. It's one of my 'untouchable' fandoms. But seeing as how you're you, I had to pause.

And considering it's been ENTIRELY too long since I've even passed a second glance over a piece of fanfiction (admitting it hurts, a lot), I hope you appreciate the pause. :-)

This was truly wonderful. The premise is what grabbed me, and it dragged me in entirely. I love the pretend "easy" conversation before Nick fell asleep, and Warrick's inner workings going crazy the entire time.

this guy didn't exist a week agoI love both of these characters, but I've never considered them in a 'shipping capacity. They're both just entirely too strong of characters. Horrible comparison, but it's sort of like why I could never ship Angel/Spike. One has to be slightly weaker, whether physically or in personality

[kindkit]

I hope you appreciate the pause

I do indeed! Thank you. :-) And thank you even more for this thoughtful, wonderful feedback. I especially appreciate your comments about Warrick saying "baby," because I thought a lot about how to make that work. One of the things I decided was that it had to occur not in a context of explicit consolation (i.e., "it's all right, baby") but in a context of praise. Because Nick's already doubting his own manhood, and the last thing he needs is to feel that Warrick's treating him like a woman. (Gender issues = Nick's, not mine.) I think if he had felt patronized, he would have gotten angry, and that obviously was not the reaction I wanted. And of course I didn't want to make the interaction too sweet-and-cuddly to be believable with these characters. /rambling

[freaky_nea]

I totally agree! Your characterisation is wonderful! Please say there will be more Nick/Warrick stuff from you! Please?

*friends you*

[kindkit]

Hi! And thank you. I can't guarantee that I'll write more Nick/Warrick, but I'm definitely interested in the characters and the pairing.