Marching Song, Part 1/?

[kimberlite8]

I wrote this for dealbreaker19 as a part of the SansaxSandor letter exchange. It blossomed from what was suppose to be one letter into a full blown
epistolary romance. This is the first letter of several letters.

Title: Marching Song,
Author: kimberlite8
Summary: Sandor's war letters to Sansa while he is on campaign. An epistolary smutfic.  "It feels so sweet to fall

Comments

[maroucya]

Wow, that was really nice! The tone was perfect; I could really picture Sandor writing the letter and almost hear his voice speaking in my head. I also loved that you didn’t shy away from showing how crude and harsh a warrior he still is, not matter his relation with Sansa and the time he has spent at the Quiet Island. That bit where he tells Sansa about that man’s head he and his crew sent flying over the Dreadfort’s wall was perfect in that sense - especially since he adds how much it made him laugh… That certainly doesn’t sound like something a man should write to his ladylove! Sandor later tells Sansa about being unsure of which things he should tell her or not and he’s obviously not lying given what I just pointed out. Still, I’m quite certain Sansa is more than used in hearing her lover say all sorts of inacceptable things so he doesn’t need worry too much.

Another nice detail: Sandor not tormenting the peasants but doing so strictly for practical reasons. Although he’s no sadist like his brother, I don’t see him caring much either. Too many fics have him being too honourable and merciful and thus, I appreciate when he’s portrayed a little more realistically - at least IMO.

I loved how we could glimpse the tenderness Sandor feels for Sansa through sentences that weren’t much tender in truth. I’m sure as the letters will pass though, he’ll become more expressive … and horny??

[kimberlite8]

The tone was perfect; I could really picture Sandor writing the letter and almost hear his voice speaking in my head.

That is the highest of praise. I admit when I'm thinking of this story (which is all the time now!), Sandor's voice is always in my head. My beta improved upon the grammar but I changed it back because Sandor's voice in my head would say something redundant like "I want you to tell me about everything I’m missing out on, being away."

I don't know if he would say something poetic as "the sole town within ten leagues that still had a heart beating inside its crippled bones." But you know my Sandor always had a way with words.

You know when I read your letter to me I had Sandor's voice in my head too? Regardless of what he's saying there's a definite cadence I hear (as well as a little growl at the end of sentences). Like the way you phrased "brought water to my mouth" - the perfect cadence for him.

"Sandor not tormenting the peasants but doing so strictly for practical reasons. "

Yes! I have always seen him as a snob (he was so upset when the BWB took his gold to feed "ugly peasants and their proxy brats"). But not a pointlessly cruel or exploitative one, he did warn the innkeeper that the tickler was going to rape his daughter, take his gold. I guess I see him like a lot of immigrant people I know - often times people who crawled out of poverty don't have a lot of
sympathy for the poor who didn't. He's a I'm looking out for #1 kind of guy and I don't see that changing ever just because he had some anger management classes.

I’m sure as the letters will pass though, he’ll become more expressive … and horny??

They are not lovers yet, just friends. I made Sansa 17 because its the age when girls want to be in love. Something has to give!

As for the horniness, I'm building it a little slow. But I tried to suggest he's super horny when he talks about mining and compares it to having sex with a virgin. I find that flirty people are always trying to bring up sex in the most mundane of situations.