Totally Not A Rant, Sorry

[veruslux]

Kay, yeah, not a rant, sorry. I've been flipping through the achives and you guys are really good at giving advice, so I thought i'd ask for some on a Nobody character of mine (technically not with the Organization), Orin. I just want to know if he's Stu-ish, and if I should change anything. Please help? Thanks!

You can totally remove this if it's not allowed *bows in apology*


Orin

Weapon- Mic Staff/Headphones (Vibrato/Frequency)          Element- Sound

Abilities

-         Can create and send sound waves out of his hand.

-         Can make concentrated balls of sound, and throw them like bombs.

-         Can send sound waves directly into a structure or the ground by touch, thus creating an earthquake or an instant crater.

-         Can use his mic as a staff or a spear.

-         Can use mic head as an amplifier for his sound wave attacks.

-         Can retract staff and re-extend it, turning it into a whip. Can then send sound waves through the cord into the head to attack from a distance.

-         Headphones are to keep his own ears from being damaged.

Background Info

• World: Dawn's Crossing, an original FF world for my fanfic
• Age: 16
•   Was a friendly, athletic, cheerful, funny guy, the class clown type. He was everyone’s friend. Not the most popular, or even popular at all, but he was liked. World: Dawn's Crossing, an original FF world for my fanfic
•  Loved to sing. Was one of those kids that annoys the hell out of his parents/friends by singing in the shower. Very good singer, though.
• His best friend was Senna, who he had known since childhood. The two of them were inseparable. Orin was the jokester, Senna the quieter one.
• One day, the two kids were out past dark, breaking the town-wide curfew. On their way home, the two saw a small boy, seemingly crying for him mother. Never ones to ignore a small child in need, the two went over and asked if they could help. He nodded, and asked to be taken home. Orin and Senna reached out and took his hands, and then he revealed his true colors- he was Hextus, a Heartless Lord (aka Ienzo's Heartless *gasp*), in search of new ‘playmates’.
• He then took the two back to Villain’s Vale, and after setting Senna up in some new clothes, dragged her out to watch him play with Orin- meaning he simply dropped him into a series of maze-like ravines, let loose a ton of hungry, addled Heartless, and watched merrily as they chased and devoured him. To Hextus’ shock and anger, once Orin’s heart had left him, the empty shell did not become a Dusk as expected; but retained his human shape. Hextus took Senna back inside, but not before opening a portal and throwing Orin through, figuring the Heartless would get him or something, too arrogant and lazy to bother finisshing him then.
• Demyx and Luxord, traveling through worlds to *spoilers for my fic, sorry, can't tell you why*, happened across Orin in Agrabah, wondering where the hell he is and why does he feel funny. Realizing immediately what had happened to him, and that the Heartless who did it would definitely have information on their objective, they took him along, helping him with his powers.
• Orin isn't really a member of the Organization (they really don't 'recruit' anymore), so his name stayed the same. His personality is still pretty much the same, but he's gotten a bit more serious now that he knows the Darkness is very, very real. He's also a little confused and bothered by the empty feeling in his chest. His main focus is really just to find Senna and kick Hextus's scrawny ass.

Kay so yeah, that's about it. Advice is appreciated, and so is concrit, Be harsh :)