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[#294 - Starting Out] with(out)

Sep 25, 2012 14:05

Title: with(out)
Challenge: #294 - Starting Out
Word Count: 568
Rating: PG-13
Summary: They are without a beginning and without an end, he tells her, but she's not inclined to believe it.
Notes: Not difficult to figure out the pairing once you start reading. Some sexual references, so beware of that. The idea for this just popped into my head ( Read more... )

kagome_angel

Comments 13

eternal_moonie September 25 2012, 19:15:28 UTC

AWESOME drabble!!

kagome_angel September 28 2012, 17:13:09 UTC

Thank you!

06seconds_left September 26 2012, 00:11:03 UTC

Ooh, creepy. This one gave me the shivers...

kagome_angel September 28 2012, 17:14:18 UTC

I kind of always write these two a little creepily (or I try to, anyway) and so I'm glad when readers make comments like this. Thank you very much!

seishonagon September 26 2012, 20:32:50 UTC

That was... creepy and impressive. And impressively creepy. Wow.

kagome_angel September 28 2012, 17:14:44 UTC

So glad you think so! Thanks for reading and commenting! ^_^

wishingdreamer5 September 28 2012, 20:59:31 UTC

This made me feel uneasy (which is not a bad thing in this case), but that was probably what you were going for. I really, really like what you did here, but if I had to explain why I wouldn't know how. :P

kagome_angel September 29 2012, 00:21:16 UTC

Heh, thank you! As long as you enjoyed it, that's what counts--you don't have to explain why. XD (I guess I like the creepiness of it~.)

iki_teru September 29 2012, 07:32:22 UTC

*wibbles* N-namine ;_;

This! this was. is. dsfklsdjf and and the words and and the hurt and and the... the little light of hope that she carries and the way she tries to pretend that he is capable of more and just this

kagome_angel September 30 2012, 01:54:49 UTC

*petpet* I like to think that she tries to see more in him. Marluxia is such a mysterious character and we don't really get to see who he was before he was a Nobody, so I think Namine speculates in the way that any of us would about him. Except she's so intimately involved (in my head-canon *LOL*) with him that it all runs so much deeper and it's hard for her to just accept that he is what he is.

She wants to see the good in him, and even though I will on the occasion write happy-ish drabbles/fics featuring these two, more often than not, there's nothing different beneath his surface. He is just as cruel as he portrays himself to be. And I think that knowledge hurts her more than she can possibly admit (at least, when I write him all creepy like this).