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I Melt With You

Mar 11, 2010 16:38

Title: I Melt With You
Participants: Xabi Alonso/Guti
Disclaimer: The product of a sick and twisted mind......
Summary: Guti gets his man.....or does he?
Note: Written for the Cabin Fever key party.

( Could you love yourself any more than you already do? )

guti, xabi alonso, cabin fever

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karneol_vision March 14 2010, 13:04:35 UTC

Nice! But for a 'not pining for Steven Gerrard'-fic, there was a great lot of Steven Gerrard in it. I'm still deciding if it wasn't too much for my liking, lol xDD

Also, I was really worried about Xabi indeed turning into the maiden while I was reading the first part, until finally the 'let me love you'-bit came up to. I think that was my favorite moment, very cool.

Fantastic sexy scenery :DD

karneol_vision March 14 2010, 13:10:42 UTC

I didn't mean to say that it's wrong to put the actual partner or another partner into the story! That's not at all the case, and actually I'm all in favor of doing it :D
Just not too much, so it might turn too awkward or kind of uneasy for all those who see them as an item, as these keys-parties also state that they are.

Not saying this happened here, lol, just my thoughts on the topic :)

rainstorm20 March 14 2010, 13:21:48 UTC

Hey, nothing wrong with voicing your thoughts; I like getting constructive criticism!

This was my first time writing Xabi/anyone else. Hell, my first time writing Xabi at all, lol!

I have to say, I did struggle with the addition of Steven Gerrard, and how to balance Xabi's apprehension(if that's the right word). Yes, Xabi misses him, but not to the point where he becomes a blushing maiden.

I hope. :D

karneol_vision March 14 2010, 13:37:38 UTC

I was more afraid of the way he seemed so quickly taken with Guti, and how easily he was becoming a blushing, sighing maiden for that man, lol. xD I don't like him being a blushing maiden for anyone; this girly shy vision of him just doesn't go with the suave and collected image I have of him :)

karneol_vision March 14 2010, 14:06:12 UTC

Damn, I meant to say 'how easily he might have become a blushing, sighing maiden for Guti' *headdesk* Sorry that came out wrong! I have trouble with conditional sentences, lol. I didn't think the way you wrote it was bad! x/

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