Darkness [Part 3]
Title: Darkness Part 3
Author: KeyJah
Characters/Pairings: Taeyeon, Yuri, Tiffany, Jessica, TaeNy, YulSic, TaeRi, JeTi, TaengSic, YulTi, small appearances by other SNSD members.
Length: Part 3/5
Genera: Angst, Romance, Smut.
Rating: R, NC-17
Summary: Darkness can have many layers with depths beyond what we can believe. What happens when you pull into it ( Read more... )
What an interesting chapter, I dare say. Quite a sadistic duo, JeTi be. I see how Yuri was guilty in the beginning, however; you may have justified her actions near the end when Jessica was having her way with Taeyeon. You said that Taeyeon was trying to fight back Yuri, but she pretty much started to give in before they were caught. To some degree she is still guilty because I would see Taeyeon as packing some punch if she really wanted to get out of that situation.
In my mind, I feel that Taeyeon is guilty and not guilty for hurting Tiffany. She should've stopped Yuri's advances, but she didn't. If Jessica didn't get the green light from Tiffany, chances are Taeyeon and Jessica would've gotten together at some point. Is Taeyeon at fault for having people cheat on their partners because she has some kind of aura about her that makes people want to jump her? Yes, if she doesn't stop them.
Is Yuri guilty? If she is, then Jessica should be guilty, too, along with Tiffany. JeTi noticed Taeyeon's sexual magnetism so shouldn't Yuri be cut the same slack? Understandable that TaeRi cheated, but they were remorseful for their actions. Did Yuri have to be treated the way she was? In the beginning, yes, but the ending is iffy because her actions were justified. The whip may have been a bit much after the justification of actions, no?
At the ending, when you said that "three were staring at the lone girl," was Taeyeon freed? You made it sound as if Taeyeon was let loose and was standing with JeTi. Unless I missed something of that like...
Anyway, enough critique!
WAE YOU FOLLOWING MEH BDSM WAYS?!?! I feel like you've read too much The Intern, and my other fics... and maybe pooltides' Sex Therapy. ROFL! It was pretty good, I dare say. Plot wise, I commented up there. Description, I like because you kept in mind certain actions and their meanings on people, instead of brushing them off. The sex was nicely done lol. I liked Chapter 2, though... but that's just me.
Good job ^^
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The chapter took a different direction than I originally planned ... I think ... in all honesty I can't quite remember all of my intentions that I had at first when I started writing this fic (meaning I should have wrote my ideas down somewhere so I wouldn't forget like the dummy I am LOL) JeTi make a great duo! Honestly, I don't know if anyone else would really fit the rolls like they do (Maybe YoonYul ... maybe ... ok no JeTi all the way!) Yes Yuri was very guilty for causing this mess but I think both of them are to be blamed equally.
I see your point there with Taeyeon being able to just say stop if she really didn't want anything more to happen so yes she is at fault just as equally in my opinion as well (maybe even a little more) If you consider the facts I think Taeyeon actually might be the more guilty party in all of this ... possibly ... I think once the next part comes out it will all unfold a lot better. The actions being not "equaly distributed" between the two girls may seem slightly harsh at the moment but the next part will end up ... I guess the term would be "evening the score board"? IDK ALL I KNOW IS WAIT AND IT'LL ALL BE GOOD~! LOOL
Oh and that last part, I guess I'll go back and re-phrase it so it's more clear. I apologize. Yuri was the one that was free. Jessica forced Yuri too look back to Taeyeon once she was free and Jessica was also looking at Taeyeon as well. Tiffany had come up next to Yuri on her other side to look at Taeyeon as well. So all three of them were looking at the girl who was alone and bound. Does that make more sense? Didn't mean to confuse you~
LMFAO~!~! I have no idea what your talking about unnie *smirk* Well I didn't mean to follow in your way~ My story deals with dark desire and vengence and just all of that dominance and submission and bondage and those crops (seriously I can't get over that when I wrote it omfg!!!! X_X) it just all ties in so well don't you think? ^^ D: I love your fics unnie <3 (oh pooltides I havent read those in a while *goes to read :P) technically I just love all of your writing ^^ my idol! Ahahaha I think it was more emotion than sex for this Chapter! The whole thing was an emotional rollercoaster and I agree that Chapter 2 would be my favourite as well (lets see if I can change that with the next two parts~ (;)
Thank you so much unnie <3 ^^
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