[fic] Loveless

[kenken18]

Title                  : Loveless

Original author   : kenken18 aka Andez

Genre               : Romance

Rating               : Everyone can read..XD

Starring             : Okamoto Keito x OC
Author's note    : I'm not pro writer, so please act kind for me...XDDD. Thanks to lha_chan who re-write this fic into English from Indonesian.

Comments

[crescentharpe]

LOOOOOOOOOONG

/bookmarks for tomorrow XD

[kenken18]

wait your next comment...<3

[crescentharpe]

i could've cried if the grammar is better but nonetheless, the plot is good.

I like how you incorporated the stars and the gloves in the story. How those good memories turned into painful ones.

I think what hurts the most is Keito's parting words where he didn't want her to look back or his resolve might fall and he won't let her go. Poor Keito but I'm proud of that decision /pats XD

great job, Andez. Next time won't you consider a beta? Take hikicha for example. She's an Indonesian I think but her choice of words are good. Her English grammar as well, of course. It's just a suggestion though~

[kenken18]

well, you know I'm not good in english grammar..XDD

I want to consider beta..
but I worry I don;t have time to read it..TT

[crescentharpe]

you're worried that you won't have time to reread what your beta has edited? O_o?

[kenken18]

maybe..XDDD
but I will consider it...really Mai..<3

[crescentharpe]

yeah please do. you are really talented in this plot that it almost made me cry~♥

[kenken18]

well, you're too praise me...
I think my fic really amateur..XD

[crescentharpe]

no i don't think i praised it too much. it's pretty objective IMO.

and i think everyone goes through the amateur stage (although up until now, i'm still an amateur) /whacked

[kenken18]

really?? *still can't believe*

aww..
you're so modest..

[crescentharpe]

that my comment is objective? i think it is. i mean i did point out your weak point right? XD

i. am. not. i'm not talented in writing that's why my level is still on where i started - at the lowest point XD

[kenken18]

hahahah yes...
but I feel happy to accept critics..
so I can correct my mistake..^^

well, i'm still love you..XD

[crescentharpe]

XD maybe one of these days you'll write one again XD

i love you too, Andez~ XD

[kenken18]

maybe...XDD

LABBB..<333

[crescentharpe]

/anticipates

LAAAAAAAAAAAAAABS MOOOOOAAAAAAAAAAR XD