so i made a dreamwidth for long fic i'm too lazy to split up into chapters

[kenkabu]

--and I posted in it!

(if you'd like to judge me on how 90% of the things i write feature kris in them, don't worry, i'm way ahead of you)

Title: Analytical Composition of Alternative Romance Theory
Details: Kris/Chanyeol, one-sided Tao/Kris; ~25,100 words; PG-13
Warnings: issues of bullying and homophobia, use of homophobic slurs; PLEASE AVOID

Comments

[fullofsummer]

I'm rly sorry for commenting here instead of the fic itself but I can never get OpenID to work for me and I don't have a dreamwidth, so ;__; hope it isn't too out of place!!

LOVED this. Chanyeol's characterisation hit all the right spots for me and I really liked the way you used it to drive the story- the way his backstory and his feelings for Kris creep out slowly. very shallow-river-running-deep, which is how I'd describe Chanyeol irl really. like, we know he's a sociable guy and has a ton of friends but sometimes he freezes up/ has weird self-conscious moments/ doesn't come across as well on camera as he probably would like, and you've transposed that into this context really beautifully. I also really liked the way you've portrayed his thoughts, the way he downplays the bullying and its effect on him. it seems very /him/ somehow: consciously he's able to move himself past it and keep on going to the parties even when he knows the bullies will be there, but it still influences him, especially in moments of insecurity. Determined (as the first comment put it) is such a good descriptor for him. Just the way Chanyeol's thoughts were related told us so much about him. I have so much admiration for that. "a person who learned all these different sides of you without you even realizing it-and who found you worthy of love"- this sentence just punched me in the heart, wow.

this review is severely lacking re comments about Kris but that doesn't imply anything about your writing but more about how lacking my headcanon is for him. I just can't really get a grasp on him somehow. although I really liked that moment when he's worried about meeting Chanyeol's friends: it rang true. I liked the image of krisyeol being quietly insecure about their places in each others' lives underneath all their bluster about their awesomeness (this I'm talking more generally in canon since Kris seems more downplayed here).

you have a lovely touch for imagery and symbolism: it's something I admired a lot in your lay/chen piece and am glad that there were glimpses of it here too.

the little details were also great: Chanyeol unironically being Jongin's greatest fanboy, Jongdae being good at Chinese!!!, Baek knowing when to turn the obnoxiousness off. Chanyeol being dumped first by all his girlfriends... Beagles attacking as one, oh my god.

tl;dr it was fantastic, I loved it a lot and am sorry for projecting my feelings onto it :(

[kenkabu]

TT________________TT this comment!!!!!!!!!!! i'm over the moon about it, thank you so much! not even sure how to reply other than to thank you a billion times i guess haha T___T i'm just relieved and happy all around because of your reaction. glad you liked chanyeol's characterization, i really really enjoyed your mini-analysis about it; i think he's much deeper than he lets on too. like not saying that exo is dumb in comparison or that chanyeol is rreally intelligent, but he seems to have a smart and capable head on his shoulders, but there's still a sorta sloppy side to him that comes out sometimes (like when he totally embarrassed himself dancing on weekly idol) that i find very interesting and almost... humanizing, if i can put it like that (but not in a robot-sense, in an idol-sense). but yeah i think you have a very strong headcanon of chanyeol so i'm super happy you liked him in my fic! :) kris is just undefinable, i don't blame you for finding him a total question mark, but as long as he didn't seem totally OOC or something then i'm happy about that too!! :) :) :)

pls don't apologize for leaving a comment here instead of DW, wtf, i would be grateful either way! openID is terrible i agree. also why would you also apologize for projecting your feelings onto it DON'T YOU REALIZE HOW GREAT THAT MAKES ME FEEL?? PRETTY DAMN GREAT

thank you again for such a great comment!! ♥