DRABBLE: Working Hard, Hardly Working, SG-1, G

[kejsarinna]

Disclaimer: Uhm, not mine.
Rating: G
Warning/ Category: nein.
Challenge Response: #11; FRE CHOICE at samcarter100

working hard, hardly working"Thank you." Sam took the plate from Jack

Comments

[l_jade]

LOVE it! thank you for writing.. sequel please :P

[majorsamfan]

It was sweet - but I checked in Word for you, and Word says it's 106. You could shave a couple off in this sentence:
Sam looked past him, out the window.

and, since Jack asks "how's it looking", you could have Sam respond:
"Good...." and leave out the looking, especially since you have it again in the next sentence. ("They don't know we're here" should be a separate sentence, though, or you need a semi-colon, not a comma, between the two phrases.)

and you could shave some off here:
Sam smiled. She had to credit their victims for choosing such a nice restaurant. Jack looked up and asked, "So..."

[kejsarinna]

thanx for the help! i've changed some stuff now, it looks much better. thank you!

[majorsamfan]

You're most welcome.

[soapbox_solo38]

XD Nice. ^^

[so_out_of_ideas]

*grin* *claps* Does he kiss her? Does he? Huhhuhhuh?

[sela21k]

"Yeah surveillance work's really tough."

That's pretty funny considering the situation. :)

Nice drabble.