Comments | keerawa: dS Fic: Safe House

keerawa

dS Fic: Safe House

Nov 12, 2007 10:56

Fandom, Pairing: Due South; Ray/Ray
Rating: NC-17
Length: 4000 words
Warnings: Very dark. Language, violence, dubcon.
Disclaimer: due South belongs to Alliance/Atlantis.
Notes: I'd like to give a shout-out to Team Angst for this one. I first got the idea in a brainstorming session with aerye. spuffyduds beta'd it, despite her comment afterwards of, "I need to ( Read more... )

due south, fic

Comments 75

akite November 12 2007, 21:00:01 UTC

Whoa! Not sure what to say, but yeah. It read real to me.

keerawa November 12 2007, 22:16:56 UTC

Thanks, akite. It feels almost too real to me. I've been writing bright, cheerful fic like a fiend to get it out of my head.

thady November 12 2007, 21:13:09 UTC

This, this... God, this is... leaving me speechless. This is creepy. Creepy but great. Sorry I can't offer a more coherent feedback. Wow.

keerawa November 12 2007, 22:18:39 UTC

Speechlessness is a solid tribute to this. If "Safe House" were a play, it would be the kind where nobody really wants to applaud at the end. Thanks, thady.

ainsley November 12 2007, 21:32:28 UTC

Wow. Astonishingly creepy yet real for these characters.

keerawa November 12 2007, 22:19:23 UTC

Thank you, ainsley. It really is kind of icky.

buzzylittleb November 12 2007, 21:33:03 UTC

Ouch! I really really liked this. The names and the pronouns were perfect. Yummy.

keerawa November 12 2007, 22:20:38 UTC

Thanks for mentioning the names, buzzy. I worked hard to get readers to buy into that, since identity is such a key piece of this story.

zabira November 12 2007, 21:54:23 UTC

you win all the awards everywhere!!! i hit a point in this story, and actually YELLED out loud to my empty apartment: YOU ARE AWESOME!

this rang so true. i love the harshness of it, i love the toughness of both rays, kowalski especially. i LOVE stories that delve in to the fact that he is an undercover operative of some considerable skill, and in to what that could potentially mean about his psyche (and you've written ALL THE GOOD ONES).

and HOORAY for balancing so skillfully on that knife-edge of non-con. oh, the wet pillow! what a great detail, among so many others.

thank you, keerawa.

keerawa November 12 2007, 23:36:10 UTC

Heh. You are one hardcore angst fan, zabira. Undercover could be such an ugly mindfuck.

The completely external POV made some things really hard to get across. I'm pretty proud of that wet pillow, the way it implied Armando's emotional state and got a reaction from Ray.

zabira November 12 2007, 23:47:35 UTC

You are one hardcore angst fan

i laughed so hard at that, and was about to disagree. i mean, i watch the silliest, sloppiest romantic comedies, and i sleep with a teddy bear!

and i almost toned down my enthusiasm in this comment, not wanting to seem like scary angst-girl, but i do have a completely genuine love for stories like this one that just twist the knife so beautifully. you did a great job with the parameters you set for yourself, and the complexities of what was happening came across loud and clear.

so maybe i AM scary angst-girl: i grew up with harvey keitel and guys like him as my original crushes, and have watched and enjoyed some really hard-core fucked up movies (i've seen 'bad lieutenant' TWICE). this story was right up my alley, i guess.

hangs head