Comments | kayliemalinza: Gleaner of Souls: Act II, scene ii (REVISED)

kayliemalinza

Gleaner of Souls: Act II, scene ii (REVISED)

Sep 30, 2012 09:42

this fucking chapter i swear to god

Hopefully this will be the last revision. I really need to get some feedback. I don't know if this is too opaque, dull, confusing, etc.

Act 1
Act 2, scene 1

( 2.2 REVISED, 2,200+ words. OFC + cherub with mention of YED )

fic: chaptered wip, supernatural

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kel_reiley September 30 2012, 22:19:28 UTC

OH THERE'S MORE! I missed your updates, so I am bookmarking this for later when I have time/brain power. YAY!

kayliemalinza October 2 2012, 16:52:19 UTC

Eeeeeeee goody, thank you! I'm especially looking to see if it MAKES SENSE because I'm stuck in that No Man's Land between not focusing too much on original characters (because readers want canon characters) and giving enough of the OCs that readers can start to connect with them.

Not to mention-- INFO DUMP CITY. If there is anything that doesn't track or is confusing or just plain dull, PLEASE TELL ME!!! I always make the story structure too complicated and pretentious. It's totally self-indulgent, but I want to make sure it's readable, too.

kel_reiley October 2 2012, 21:31:35 UTC

WILL DO. I'm going to go back and start from the beginning.

kayliemalinza October 14 2012, 05:54:31 UTC

*poke* Have you gotten around to reading this yet?

kel_reiley October 14 2012, 08:57:49 UTC

I have not :( sorry! I just finished the hunger games books, then I came down with the plague and concentrating on words is hard so i've mostly been lying around watching dead like me marathon

I am going to save this tab so it will pop up every time i open my browser to remind me though

hopefully the sneezing and coughing and eyeball blurring will be gone in a day or two

how's it going?

kayliemalinza October 14 2012, 12:12:09 UTC

Oh no, that sounds awful. :/ It's just that time of year. I got hit with the bug a couple of weeks ago. I felt fine, mostly, but I was a CONSTANT SNOT MACHINE. blegh.

I am going to save this tab so it will pop up every time i open my browser to remind me though
*^^* ty bunches.

I hope you get better fast!

kel_reiley October 17 2012, 10:20:32 UTC

OK! The plague is receding... or whatever it is that plagues do. Brain is at 78% at least :) Maybe even 81%

I seriously love your OFC. Like, I want to see her on screen or in graphic novel form at least. I WANT TO KNOW HER STORY ( ... )

kayliemalinza October 20 2012, 01:28:33 UTC

:D :D :D ( ... )

kel_reiley October 21 2012, 09:03:16 UTC

I mean, are *you* gonna get bored with Manakel unless Dean and Sam show up? If you're okay with it, I'm okay with it. - Not bored, I'm just curious as to when in the timeline we are. Dean was gone for... 4 months Earth time? So in the 1st part with Sam, how long had it been? How desperate is he getting? Is Ruby not in this version? Are you going way AU? (I don't actually need to see Dean suffereing in Hell - that is not my fave thing.)

But Balthazar! YAY!

RE: the Vessel stuff - yes, that works :)

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