[fic] Anesthetized

[kathy20121]

Fandom: Naruto
Pairing: Uzumaki Naruto and Uchiha Sasuke
Prompt: Birthday
Word count: 4,447
Rating: M
Disclaimer: I don’t own Naruto
Warnings: Explicit sexual situations.
Summary: He had come to understand that just as alcoholics craved for liquor and canvas needed brush-strokes, Naruto would always long for Sasuke… The war is over. Naruto

Comments

[repanse]

Naruto doesn't work as a seme, that's why you can't help but make him sweet. Uke!Sasuke works even less, no matter how cute he may appear. Naruto doesn't have one bit of that initiative when it comes to physical touch (let alone sex) and Sasuke just isn't the character. I'm sorry but I'm a IC-whore so I don't even consider NaruSasu an option. I want to be clear though, to me the problem is in NaruSasu itself, not in one's writing skills...in fact you did well, you minimized damage especially by not making things too sappy (something I can't stand regardless, NaruSasu or not).
The only thing I would like to point out to you is the theme of Naruto or Sasuke being abused by villagers/shinobis/etc.....maybe it's because I found it in soooo many stories, but I can't help but feel like it's stereotyped and poor drama.

[kathy20121]

Thanks so much for such a complete review, really, it's good to have pointed out what you're doing wrong in order to grow as a writer

because i've just seen this argument too often.

[transient_words]

I'm sorry. I'm going to chime in here, and I didn't even read your fic (though you seem to be a decent writer and all

Re: because i've just seen this argument too often.

[kathy20121]

Ok, let me rephrase that 'cause I really think I used the wrong word. Oblivious does fit better, but when I used the word innocent I meant sexually, not otherwise, but either way is wrong (I'm going around in circles, sorry) is not that he's innocent, it's that it seems as he's a bit uninterested, I mean, he did create the sexy no jutsu, but if I recall correctly, when he gives the book to Kakashi at the beginning of the second part, he said something like he didn't understand it or found it boring, idk

Re: because i've just seen this argument too often.

[transient_words]

I’m sorry I didn’t mean to come across as attacking you; I was just commenting more on the review you got. I didn’t even read your author’s notes (I might have been rude for chiming in like that, sorry again

Re: because i've just seen this argument too often.

[kathy20121]

No, it didn't, believe me! It's just that you referred to her use of the word 'sweet' and I think she got that from my author's note xD

Either of the reasons you exposed is perfectly possible, I mean I do believe that even if right now he's not interested due to the shenanigans going on, once it's all over, he is going to be interested in the future.

Sure, I think he can be rough, but I wanted to make him gentle towards Sasuke 'cause it was their first time and Sasuke was in a fragile mental state (I'm a helpless romantic, I can't help it! xD)

Yeah, I don't like Sasuke being completely saddistic, a bit rough yeah, but not that saddistic.

PS: Aaaw, that's absolutely awesome, I recently finished watching Code Geass (this saturday) and I absolutely loved it, though I honestly spend my fair share of episodes hating Suzaku for always being against Lelou, but the ending's amazing, it redeemed them for me! xD

And don't worry about it, it's nice to read other people's opinions and having a healthy debate =)

[kathy20121]

Thanks so much for reading, commenting and the welcome! I appreciate of you making that remark, I'll take it into account for next fics

[repanse]

Don't worry, I never said it wasn't plausible. ;)

[repanse]

I think everyone can express an opinion, so I don't see why I should labeled as "rude" only because I expressed mine. I don't think I mortified kathy20121 or her work with what I said and I invite her to say otherwise if I'm wrong. There was already a exchange of ideas between kathy20121 and another reader about this topic, which I commented upon. So, I think that what is rude is bursting in here saying "sorry I didn't read your work but whatever" just to comment what a reader said, like transient_words did

[repanse]

I guess it's all a matter of opinions. In my point of view it makes a big difference and like I said, I'm tired of people saying "but it's the same pairing" as if they're stating that sky is blue and that's the end of the story. Anyway I apologize too if I misunderstood what you said.

[repanse]

Don't worry, I never said it wasn't plausible. ;)