Hiruma, on the sudden change of traditions...

[kasugai_gummie]

Happy belated Turkey Day everybody! Um.... I want to say that I'm still on a writing hiatus, but Eyeshield 21 has been eating my brain. Which is why you have this very badly, dialogue-less piece of experimental crap. My writing skills have detoriated drastically and it's so fucking HARD to keep up with the amount of plunnies that have suddenly

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[kasugai_gummie]

Unfortunately, yeah. Hiruma has one dirty mouth that spawns "fuck" like a rabid bunny. I was seriously torn between the amount I thought he would say. It was like, "I don't have enough fucks! Dammit, gotta insert one in here, there, there too! ::moments later:: ... did I go overboard? Fuck..." I'm not particularily satisfied with this piece; especially not with all the liberties with the undisclosed location which is his house. >O

XD Let me just smother you with love for another good measure though: ♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥ I simply adore you for providing good, solid criticism that makes sense. Your reaction to the heavy emphasis on weaponry in particular rings true. I'm a severe military history geek and actually did research on the different types of equipment the author draws Hiruma with. Don't worry, you're actually normal to find all the technical jargon boring as hell.

Hiruma has so many quirks. It's hard to satisfy them all... T3T

I just wish I knew/remembered who Musashi was/isUm.... how far have you read for ES? If memory serves me

[lil_blossom]

You lie! Your writing skills haven't deteriorated at all. And I rather liked it without dialogue. This had a nice flow to it, and the whole setting fit very well.
Granted, my critique can't be that great... I've only read a bit of ES21 and that was ages ago. And I could also be biased because I'm rather fond of your writing style in general, and sometimes my biases have a tendancy to stick with me like a vindictive cactus needle to a finger.

[kasugai_gummie]

You're flattering me... v_v But then again, I didn't give this a good, thorough once-over before posting it this time.... so I'll just take your word for it.

You too? Only reading "a bit" of Eyeshield? Tsk. That won't do. XD ::also directs you towards http://www.stoptazmo.com:: Go read more than a bit. Hiruma likes the attention, after all. ;3

[exwaiz]

Eyeshield fic! OMG, woman, I love you!!!!

Will leave a real comment when I'm a little less drunk. Yes. XDXD

[kasugai_gummie]

OH NOEES~!! :O..... don't get a hangover?

Wil be awaiting your thoughts then. XD

[exwaiz]

Is it bad that I don't remember writing that comment? -___-;

[kasugai_gummie]

....... XD;; No, not at all. LJ's comment notification was turned off for quite a while. I've been recently getting comment-emails from mid-November and the likes. @_@ Makes for some confusion, it does.

[biggersandwich]

"Underage and psychotic" is about right! This is perfect though because he's insane but randomly normal (he's cleaning his room by shoving things in closets like any teenage boy - but those things are weapons; he's reminiscing over memories of "friends" - as they relate to large quantities of weaponry).

And his method of dealing with the problem kills me (especially as he would totally do that XD).

[kasugai_gummie]

::is slowly but surely being coaxed out of the hole of "my writing sux"::

Thank you~~~ especially for the feedback that tells me how you responded to whatever details that struck your fancy. ♥

he's reminiscing over memories of "friends" - as they relate to large quantities of weaponry)

I took one look at that and was like, "YES OHMYGOD SOMEONE UNDERSTOOD WHAT I WAS TRYING TO DO ASDLFKJWE." XDDD

[crunchy_salad]

I was so happy to check this community and find a fresh fic waiting ^_^ Those MusaHiru hints absolutely made my day. And the whole piece was very much Hiruma, which is very cool, as he's not the easiest to write.

[kasugai_gummie]

I'm very flattered the hints made your day. :D Especially since I've also very much enjoyed the ES21 fics you write (and I'm sorry I haven't commented so far. Been catching up on lectures but will rectify that very, very soon @_@).

[crunchy_salad]

Oh, don't worry about it. I remember how busy college is!