~BSG: Unintended Consequences

May 21, 2010 23:00

Title:  Unintended Consequences
Author:  kastari
Summary:  Not everything is going to be the way you think it ought to be.
Characters:  Bill Adama
Rating:  T
Word Count:  100
Author’s Note:  Written for the 9th ar_drabbles challenge.  1st Person POV.  Prompt:  Water.  Thanks to frakcancer for the beta.
Disclaimer:  I’m just playing in Universal’s sandbox.
I am broken in two. )

drabble challenge, bill adama, ar_drabbles, drabbles, drabble, bsg

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bsg_aussiegirl May 22 2010, 10:51:42 UTC
I'm all teary. That last line. *sob*

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kastari May 24 2010, 06:01:13 UTC
The whole thing makes me sob. That she was always gonna die no matter what. I just knew it...

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lacklusterfic May 22 2010, 14:18:30 UTC
This would work for the tenth challenge as well, except for the setting. It certainly brought a tear to my eye!

There is no Earth, no shore or sailing ship.
But if I don’t believe, I lose you.

That's the power of religion... it promises things that the rational mind rejects, but the heart desperately yearns for.

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redrockcan May 22 2010, 19:59:33 UTC
Can I just say I love your comment, I totally agree. Fantastic way to put it and perfectly describes Bill's thoughts.

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kastari May 24 2010, 06:22:14 UTC
Thanks so much for reading.

: )

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kastari May 24 2010, 06:06:13 UTC
Yeah, that damn setting for challenge #10...

I think Laura was Bill's religion all along.

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twilight_sad May 22 2010, 17:06:20 UTC
feel like i am repeating myself, but then again, that's no bad thing for what i am about to say: yet again, loving the lyrical quality of your writing! the rhythm and metre, as well as the refrain "I don't believe, but you do", make this almost song-like and give it a tone that fits the topic and the train of bill's thought really really well. also, the topic: heartbreaking.

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kastari May 24 2010, 06:09:45 UTC
The repetition was my framework.

Songfic without using a song for the fic.

I'm happy you enjoyed the drabble. Thanks so much for reading & commenting.

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redrockcan May 22 2010, 19:54:29 UTC
I totally agree with twilight's comments,this is nothing short of beautiful poetry. Beautiful and heart breaking,it just cuts right to Bill and his being pulled between these two thoughts.

"In a boat that slices through the water, bringing you closer and taking you farther away." This line in particular just cuts me right to the bone. Wonderful, wonderful work. I'm sniffly at this one too.

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kastari May 24 2010, 06:14:28 UTC
Heartbreaking--yes, so much of A/R is, isn't it?

I love the word slice. And I find the image of a boat slicing through water very visceral & clear.

And yes, how ironic that Laura's boat takes her closer to her shore, but father away from Bill.

As it does/did to Bill, her illness & death breaks/broke my heart.

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frakcancer May 22 2010, 21:07:39 UTC
Everyone needs something to believe in. Maybe that's what's meant by there being no atheists in foxholes. Bill can't believe in Laura's faith, but he has to believe in the believer, which means believing in it being true, at least for her. If he doesn't, what's left to love?

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kastari May 24 2010, 06:21:17 UTC
I think Bill drifts toward agnostic as BSG advances. Perhaps he's afraid not to believe. If he doesn't, what is left? He loses Laura in the real world & the afterlife--if one exists.

Then again, Bill tells Laura that she made him believe. Maybe not in her vision or religion, but simply in Laura.

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