Ok, am going to type this review in Notepad as I read it, because have a lot of things to say.
Firstly, I like the rough stuff, both to read and to do. Intrigued by your warnings.
Love the banter between House and post-coital Wilson. The subtle dangerous conversations are always held when one person is less than fully functional, often sated.
Slow description of Greg in Dominant!seducer mode was mouth wateringly gorgeous. As an ex-HP-Fandom refugee, it threw me back to Sirius, and then Hugh Laurie combined in happy thoughts with Gary Oldman, but I'm waffling now. I would pay money for a high res photo of House in said attire.
"but this particular word carried a world of self-loathing. It came out slowly, but matter-of-factly, in the same tone of voice they might use to discuss a particularly hopeless diagnosis."
You give such a good dissection of the word "whore" here. It works well in the mind of House as he figures out Wilson like a case to crack. Also, it seems as though you use it properly. It's a word with some weight, which a lot of fanfic/stories that I've read which use it don't seem to get.
"Greg experienced the grim pleasure of watching his normally lithe friend being temporarily graceless, even… crippled"
This line killed me. It was painful, but in the kind of pain [generic person] likes kind of pain.
"Greg fucked Jimmy into oblivion and went there with him. If James had started crying, so much the better."
Beautiful line, however I personally don't like "Jimmy" used in general. Doesn't lose much of the lines' potency though.
"whole point of Wilson and House’s friendship was safety"
Love.
Oh, oh the end! I love the "How'd I play?", it was sweet, and led us up to the revelation that Wilson was the dom. I can't see Wilson as a dom, because he's a teddy bear (in my head, ignore me, I'm basking in the glow of this fic). Hmm, he can frown though. Damn, I really want to read some House/Wilson where Wilson is giving the orders now. Nice story, built up well, and had a cute end, even if it is a bit mean of me to giggle at Julie being left a bit indisposed...
First of all, thank you for reading and giving such a detailed comment. I live for this stuff. One thing I'd like to say is that this was my first H/W fic after spending about 3 months reading the house_slash archives. Since then, I've gotten much more sensitive to the use of smut cliches by myself and others and much, much less likely to use "Greg," "James," and especially "Jimmy." I see that you also commented on "Rainy Night In Princeton" and I think you can see a lot of improvement in my writing between the two stories.
I'm really happy with the bits you picked out for praise. One of my major kinkyboots involves the use of "rough" words and verbal abuse so I take and write those scenes very seriously.
I'm all about the "good lines" so I love comments where people mention specific ones.
The whole Wilson is the Dom at home bit, I'm still not sure if I meant that to be serious or if Wilson is just fucking with House there. I've always tried to avoid the "evil Julie" paradigm which is very prevalent in House-fic especially 2nd season, abetted by "canon" in the "Odd Couple" arc, especially "Clueless.
There have been very few Dom!Wilson fics. There's just something about RSL that makes him look vulnerable, especially when he's doing the voice break. It's very hard to imagine him in that position. And third season canon, especially of late has made him an absolute wuss. At this point it's easier to imagine dom!Chase.
Thanks again for such a great comment and being willing to do con-crit when you see it necessary. Very few are able to do that.
*curtsies* Good fics deserve praise, and even though I'm hideously hypocritical and often post replies of incoherency, it's nice to have a review once in a while, rather than responses. I particularly liked the lines I had mentioned. I came to this fandom basically piggy-backing people's lists of recommendations in their memories and things. Will definitely look at that community though.
Yes, some clichés are off-putting: for example, I've just learnt to phase out 'Jimmy', but I really don't like it at all. However, I can cope with James. It sounds more sincere perhaps. I don't know. More real? Sounds better when gasped too, :P
Rough words are a good, and remarkably effective kink which I confess to sharing. It can easily be done wrong, though, as I would imagine the best kinks can.
Ah, that's odd. I shall have to reread story with Wilson's Dom status stated sardonically. It probably works better. I probably just missed it. It seemed a bit odd just stated. Come to think of it, it works much better as a joke. I've yet to write House fanfiction, it's hard to say things which haven't been said.
There is something about RSL. *gutter glow as she tries to imagine him dominant over House, and fails* Oh dear. He is quite cuddly. There's an avatar floating about with Wilson, an equals sign, and a teddy bear. He can still pull rank over House though, in a slightly desperate way. Dom!Chase? I seem to have been finding links to many a Chase fic. He's still a duckling though :P A pet maybe, but a duckling nonetheless. He is a character which Wilson could dominate, I've seen.
Oh thank you very much! I'm just trying to remember, (I've been gorging on House fic recently) that I read a dom!Wilson today. *skips off to find it* Missing Sin, by onewayfreak Which has an interesting step dynamic of power - Chase at the bottom, House at the top. But that's not the one I'm looking for. Hmm. An Honest Mistake - Acidic Flower, also HWC, but this Was the one I was referring to. Wilson is just as demanding. If you don't know it you might like it. I've linked you to the part with the links to the rest of the chapters. There's only four parts.
acidic_flower is a goddess. An Honest Mistake is one of favorite fics EVER. I love sexually aggressive Wilson, although I'm not sure it's exactly the same as dom!Wilson.
You have a point there, a good one. I shall therefore backtrack and say that sexually aggressive Wilson is definitely an emerging kink of mine, and that I shall reserve judgement on Dom!Wilson until I read some :P
Firstly, I like the rough stuff, both to read and to do. Intrigued by your warnings.
Love the banter between House and post-coital Wilson. The subtle dangerous conversations are always held when one person is less than fully functional, often sated.
Slow description of Greg in Dominant!seducer mode was mouth wateringly gorgeous. As an ex-HP-Fandom refugee, it threw me back to Sirius, and then Hugh Laurie combined in happy thoughts with Gary Oldman, but I'm waffling now. I would pay money for a high res photo of House in said attire.
"but this particular word carried a world of self-loathing. It came out slowly, but matter-of-factly, in the same tone of voice they might use to discuss a particularly hopeless diagnosis."
You give such a good dissection of the word "whore" here. It works well in the mind of House as he figures out Wilson like a case to crack. Also, it seems as though you use it properly. It's a word with some weight, which a lot of fanfic/stories that I've read which use it don't seem to get.
"Greg experienced the grim pleasure of watching his normally lithe friend being temporarily graceless, even… crippled"
This line killed me. It was painful, but in the kind of pain [generic person] likes kind of pain.
"Greg fucked Jimmy into oblivion and went there with him. If James had started crying, so much the better."
Beautiful line, however I personally don't like "Jimmy" used in general. Doesn't lose much of the lines' potency though.
"whole point of Wilson and House’s friendship was safety"
Love.
Oh, oh the end! I love the "How'd I play?", it was sweet, and led us up to the revelation that Wilson was the dom. I can't see Wilson as a dom, because he's a teddy bear (in my head, ignore me, I'm basking in the glow of this fic). Hmm, he can frown though. Damn, I really want to read some House/Wilson where Wilson is giving the orders now. Nice story, built up well, and had a cute end, even if it is a bit mean of me to giggle at Julie being left a bit indisposed...
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I'm really happy with the bits you picked out for praise. One of my major kinkyboots involves the use of "rough" words and verbal abuse so I take and write those scenes very seriously.
I'm all about the "good lines" so I love comments where people mention specific ones.
The whole Wilson is the Dom at home bit, I'm still not sure if I meant that to be serious or if Wilson is just fucking with House there. I've always tried to avoid the "evil Julie" paradigm which is very prevalent in House-fic especially 2nd season, abetted by "canon" in the "Odd Couple" arc, especially "Clueless.
There have been very few Dom!Wilson fics. There's just something about RSL that makes him look vulnerable, especially when he's doing the voice break. It's very hard to imagine him in that position. And third season canon, especially of late has made him an absolute wuss. At this point it's easier to imagine dom!Chase.
Thanks again for such a great comment and being willing to do con-crit when you see it necessary. Very few are able to do that.
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I came to this fandom basically piggy-backing people's lists of recommendations in their memories and things. Will definitely look at that community though.
Yes, some clichés are off-putting: for example, I've just learnt to phase out 'Jimmy', but I really don't like it at all. However, I can cope with James. It sounds more sincere perhaps. I don't know. More real? Sounds better when gasped too, :P
Rough words are a good, and remarkably effective kink which I confess to sharing. It can easily be done wrong, though, as I would imagine the best kinks can.
Ah, that's odd. I shall have to reread story with Wilson's Dom status stated sardonically. It probably works better. I probably just missed it. It seemed a bit odd just stated. Come to think of it, it works much better as a joke. I've yet to write House fanfiction, it's hard to say things which haven't been said.
There is something about RSL. *gutter glow as she tries to imagine him dominant over House, and fails* Oh dear. He is quite cuddly. There's an avatar floating about with Wilson, an equals sign, and a teddy bear. He can still pull rank over House though, in a slightly desperate way. Dom!Chase? I seem to have been finding links to many a Chase fic. He's still a duckling though :P A pet maybe, but a duckling nonetheless. He is a character which Wilson could dominate, I've seen.
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Missing Sin, by onewayfreak Which has an interesting step dynamic of power - Chase at the bottom, House at the top. But that's not the one I'm looking for. Hmm.
An Honest Mistake - Acidic Flower, also HWC, but this Was the one I was referring to. Wilson is just as demanding. If you don't know it you might like it. I've linked you to the part with the links to the rest of the chapters. There's only four parts.
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