That's because it's easy to go 'I BET PERCEPTOR DELETED HIS EMOTIONS BECAUSE HE COULDN'T STOP HAPPY SQUEALING AT THE BEAKERS ALL THE TIME'
If you were doing crack, it wouldn't be a problem. If it was a short visual comic, it wouldn't be a problem. This is neither. It's like if you actually tried to make Prime shoving Megatron's gun up his ass into a legitimate, dramatic scene. DOESN'T WORK SO WELL.
OR DOES IT?
And I think that's a misconception. If you want vague, stick with a very broad and unenlightening omnipresent. Like Tori did for her recent ficlet. You can use a lack of insight without using first person. In first person, you're inside someone's head. If it's vague, then the reader is just going to think that the main character is brainless and vague. Details can be missed. Misconceptions can be made. But it should still be something that's fairly character laden.
Harry Potter does it fairly well. It follows Harry so closely that it has almost an in his head first person feeling though it's not written first person. But we, the reader, know what he knows, and are given his conclusions- many of which are later proven to be incorrect.
Oooh. You're making me imagine his widdle adorable microscope spark BREAKING OUT. Though with you bastards it would be more like it tries so hard to express that he slowly BURNS OUT FROM THE INSIDE.
The tension was so great it was nearly tangible, nearly a solid substance in the air. Prime was glad that none of his warriors were around to see this - he would never live it down. Their faith in him would be shattered, their questions as to why the Matrix would choose someone like him...
Prime ran his fingers once more over the ridged grey that made up the grip, not quite metal but not quite rubber. Could he do this? Even if there was the slightest chance it would end the war...?
Cerulean optics dimmed and narrowed. If Prime had a mouth, he would have grimaced then. There was no choice; it had to be done. He could almost hear Megatron lauding over him, silently celebrating his psychological victory over the Autobot leader.
Finally, Prime held the long-barreled pistol down and moved his body over it. With a groan, he lowered his hips, feeling humiliation spread as the tip of Megatron's silencer penetrated his anal port....
If you were doing crack, it wouldn't be a problem. If it was a short visual comic, it wouldn't be a problem. This is neither. It's like if you actually tried to make Prime shoving Megatron's gun up his ass into a legitimate, dramatic scene. DOESN'T WORK SO WELL.
OR DOES IT?
And I think that's a misconception. If you want vague, stick with a very broad and unenlightening omnipresent. Like Tori did for her recent ficlet. You can use a lack of insight without using first person. In first person, you're inside someone's head. If it's vague, then the reader is just going to think that the main character is brainless and vague. Details can be missed. Misconceptions can be made. But it should still be something that's fairly character laden.
Harry Potter does it fairly well. It follows Harry so closely that it has almost an in his head first person feeling though it's not written first person. But we, the reader, know what he knows, and are given his conclusions- many of which are later proven to be incorrect.
Oooh. You're making me imagine his widdle adorable microscope spark BREAKING OUT. Though with you bastards it would be more like it tries so hard to express that he slowly BURNS OUT FROM THE INSIDE.
Why am I stuck with a bunch of tragedy lovers?
AND LET'S SEE YOU DO THAT CRACKFIC. I DARE YOU.
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Prime ran his fingers once more over the ridged grey that made up the grip, not quite metal but not quite rubber. Could he do this? Even if there was the slightest chance it would end the war...?
Cerulean optics dimmed and narrowed. If Prime had a mouth, he would have grimaced then. There was no choice; it had to be done. He could almost hear Megatron lauding over him, silently celebrating his psychological victory over the Autobot leader.
Finally, Prime held the long-barreled pistol down and moved his body over it. With a groan, he lowered his hips, feeling humiliation spread as the tip of Megatron's silencer penetrated his anal port....
YOU FUCKING ASKED FOR IT.
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CRACKFIC WAS THE IRONHIDE/TRACKS! GUN UP HIS ASS WAS LIKE DR. SMOOV.
LKDJSFKLJSDLKFJD FFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFF
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