[Fic] Luck (Sugizo/Yoshiki) [oneshot]

[kami_chama_luv]

Title: Luck
Author: kami_chama_luv
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: malexmale relations, smex, swear words, unbetaed
Pairings: Yoshiki (X JAPAN, S.K.I.N.) x Sugizo (LUNA SEA, S.K.I.N.)
Disclaimer: I own no one...unfortunately. I would love to own Sugizo...but for now, "May the Peace be with You"! (Sugizo for World Leader)
Comments: Written for therapydotai for her birthday! Happy late b-

Comments

[victoriakada]

*Looks at your fic* Sugizo has a real name? (never managed to look past that profile picture)

Love: I really like your dialogue. And the idea is so very cute. And Luna is there. How I wondered if she ever found those mostly naked pictures of Sugizo that are online. Really though your dialogue was awesome.

Critiques: First because NO one in Jrock fanfic land gets this right and I somehow hope one day to put an end to it…
Brunette - used more for females with brown hair
Brunet - used more for males with brown hair

You should work on your flow a bit.. (suggested by the person who wrote the most sporadic fic in Jrock land) Flow takes practice. Read Marcel Proust or Novala Takemoto they have nice flow. More detailing would be nice which will help with the flow. Try to vary your sentence structure. Not so much Noun verb, noun verb..but again I don’t think a lot of people care too much about sentence structure.

Wait!. You’re in the KiritoX Aiji community… I demand you write something there that way I’m not the only one. (I hope by now our comment relationship has made it so we can demand stuff from one another) In fact we should co-write a story..that sounds like fun if you’re up for it…or if you’d like I could just beta for you on the next project you work on.

[kami_chama_luv]

Yes, he has a real name. XD I love Sugizo.

REally? I never knew that. I will make sure to use that from now! *nods*

I know my flow sucks. That's just what my head flows. I have many years to improve though ^-^ I know my description sucks. Sometimes I get really descriptive and people complain it's too much, so I just leave it at that. Ah! @.@ I thought I had enough verying. Apparently not. T.T

XD I really like KiritoxAiji, but I only suggest it in my MayaxAiji fanfics. I've never given thought to writing it since I have my own personal Kirito pairing. ^-^

Yes, that's fine! And I'd love to co-write! And a beta would be great too! XD (Although, I never really seem to need a beta. Only occasionally XD)

[victoriakada]

MayaXAiji fic? Paa I much rather see Aiji with Intetsu from Ayabie (because it’s totally not what I’m writing a fic about) I’m also in the process of an KxA..ahh too much too much. For some reason in my head Maya is a lion so he can’t be with anyone.

Oh too much description can turn people off it had little flow, which might be what those people were saying.

AH beta your grammar etc. I found nothing wrong with. I was thinking beta as in to help you with your flow and such. I hope you wouldn’t mind that, because I would love so very much to help you. So feel free to send the next one you write my way for me to look at.

[kami_chama_luv]

Maya's a total sweetie pie to me, so it's easy to write as him. Also, since he and Aiji are in a band together, it made sense to me. I really love their pairing though.

Oh! That'd probably be great. I do need to work on it more. Unfortunately, my English class doesn't teach creative writing this year, so I won't be able to develop it there.

So, for a collab fic, what would you be interested in doing?

[victoriakada]

Collaboration fic…. Soo it seems we can’t have Maya or Kirito in it. Do you know Kaya? Something with him might be cool..Or plastic Tree. (if you haven’t notice I know slightly older Jrock people)

Is it ok if I add you on yahoo messenger? It might be easier to talk of this there.

[kami_chama_luv]

We could use Kirito, but I usually write him with one person. It's okay to switch up though. Oh! I love Kaya!! I have...4 pairings I like with him xD For Plastic Tree, I only know Ryutaro, so that's not much. I do like their music. I like old and new bands, so I'm up to date on everything. =D

Ummm...I only have Yahoo! at one of my houses, but I could try to install it on my other. Do you have MSN? If not, I'll use my Yahoo! more.

[victoriakada]

Sorry I don’t have MSN. I have yahoo though. I’ll be without internet for tomorrow due to moving. Maybe e-mail would be better. Here e-mail all your parings and any ideas you can come up with to Victoria_kada@yahoo.com

[kami_chama_luv]

Alright. I will do that. Um, I'll try to get that to you quickly. Also, I'll just install Yahoo on my other comp. None of my friends were ever on, so I stopped using it, but I have no problem using it once more! ^-^