disconnect - workshopped version
here's the version i ended up bringing to the workshop. it was well received and a success in my book because the tech savvy folks (at least one gal) got the subject right away, while non-tech savvy folks (including the instructor) enjoyed getting lost in it as a kind of secret love affair :)
Actually, when one of the participants spoke up with her iPhone/iPad interpretation, tom (instructor) complained "Oh now you've ruined this poem for me!" LOL!
Also, success in that no one brought up internet porn or sex. But some people didn't know what a junco was, and no one knew what a drupe is.
disconnect
my latest love
your unbuttoned sleeve
calling byte-sized daydreams
scattered
like seeds to common juncos
bobbing under the blushed
loosening of dogwood drupes
always eyes groundward
last night I left you
at the café
woke to moonlight
casting winter-bare fingers across the table
grasping for the time
the span of my sleeping
Actually, when one of the participants spoke up with her iPhone/iPad interpretation, tom (instructor) complained "Oh now you've ruined this poem for me!" LOL!
Also, success in that no one brought up internet porn or sex. But some people didn't know what a junco was, and no one knew what a drupe is.
disconnect
my latest love
your unbuttoned sleeve
calling byte-sized daydreams
scattered
like seeds to common juncos
bobbing under the blushed
loosening of dogwood drupes
always eyes groundward
last night I left you
at the café
woke to moonlight
casting winter-bare fingers across the table
grasping for the time
the span of my sleeping