Comments | kalinda001: B7 Perceptions: A Difference of Visions

kalinda001

B7 Perceptions: A Difference of Visions - Chapter 02

Mar 25, 2009 13:25

Category: Humour, Drama and Angst (and some singing)
Rating: Gen
10th Story of Perceptions
Sequel to Mysteries and Discoveries

Introduction: The intruder. The women have a time alone.

Author's note: There has been a major readjustment of scenes and paragraphs in Chapter Two due to some material that is being inserted. I have split Chapter Two and ( Read more... )

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Comments 8

vilakins March 25 2009, 21:38:43 UTC

Poor friendly, helpful Spot!

They won't like being forced into being friends!

He seemed to be blubbering
Vila was crying controllably??? Do you mean babbling?

kalinda001 March 25 2009, 21:53:39 UTC

LOL yes I meant, babbling. Now it would be funny having him blubbering...

jaxomsride March 26 2009, 01:25:17 UTC

Aww poor Spot cleaner!
Hope Corinne likes him or it maybe a case of"Out damned Spot!"

kalinda001 March 26 2009, 01:27:01 UTC

lol! poor Spot

vilakins March 27 2009, 10:14:50 UTC

I like the additional scene with Cally talking about Auron and maybe introducing an idea about Servalan being down on cloning. I wonder why? Perhaps she has / had her own cloning setup.

Cally was stunned, "All those years…I never knew this was here."
Is Cally talking about the Liberator? She hasn't been on this ship for years, has she?

Cally wanted to send a sigh and a a mental roll of her eyes but refrained. *You didn't. *
A superfluous a. :-)

kalinda001 March 27 2009, 12:05:55 UTC

Is Cally talking about the Liberator?

Yes, she's referring to the Liberator. I'll fix that.

kalinda001 March 27 2009, 12:34:00 UTC

I'm glad you liked the new scene. It was a challenge in many ways. It became easier towards the last half of the scene.

One thing I've always found in action-oriented shows was that when they have conversations between women, that is if they ever bother to have them have any at all, is that it seems really boring and just makes you want them to get to something more important. I don't know whether it's because the majority of writers are, or were, men and they just don't portray women very well or have much interest other than in caricatures of ones.

I tried to add interesting points for this conversation by inserting different elements of mystery, discovery and angst.

jaxomsride March 29 2009, 02:38:31 UTC

I like the addition, but poor melancholy Cally. Avon is sometimes wiser than she knows.