KakaSaku drabble fic!

[nectarene]

I promised my poor Kashi muse that he’d get some relaxing sexy time after being put through the metaphorical wringer in CrazySickBeautiful.  (Which, btw, is an awesome one-shot written by me.  I think it’s awesome anyway. Go read it.  It’s on my account :D )

This one is quick and flirty and fun, and my first attempt at KakaSaku. I really do love

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[serenitytouched]

I love how you played with the senses in this piece such as: "Like tangerines dipped in rain and drizzled in honey-spice." That just makes me wanna go, MmMmm. =p

Critique wise, only thing for me is seeing hot-smoked daze twice one right after another in the same sentence. I'd changed the second use to something else to give it a little more variety.

And just a side note on your description - even if you are a bit lazy to not make it longer (which I think the length now is just fine)... I hope you're least doing enough to where you're overall happy with it to share. That's kind of more important than just the length. I've read things that are just 100 words and it still being magnificent, you know?

Anyway, nice work and ty for sharing! Hope you keep on writing some more KakaSaku lovelies.

[nectarene]

Thank you i'm glad you liked it!

Thats true, there are some things that are manage to convey masterpiece in 500 words or less. I am happy with this though, Its quick and fun and made me happy.

Thankyou!