[fic] Retribution Sixteen
I'm so so so very sorry for the lateness of this chapter. Work has really been killing me due to a sudden shortage of staff. I swear I had to write this while on the elliptical because I had no other time. Also sorry if it sucks or not up to my usual standard. While I wasn't in a rush, I didn't really have time to edit and rewrite like usual. Other
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I' ve been reading your ff for a while now and since I read the comment of The Rambling Ragdoll, it's kinda encouraged me to leave a comment as well!
First of all, your ff is simply gorgeous!!! I realy like FeixMik and I was very disappointed that they haven't got more appearance in the main story (well, I didn't read the novel but seems like it wasn't as good as expected) :( I absolutely have to agree with both of you, I think that the relationship (if you could even called it like that) between AxA is kinda...weird?! I don't like Asami being so dominant and Akihito surrendering to his behavior.
I think the relationship you've developed between Fei and Mik is way more realistic. (I know, unfortunately they didn't exist in reality^^) But still I feel more comfortable with a relationship where both are treated equally.
I realy liked the way you described their character. It's kinda like you get to know them and it feels like they realy do exist :) I think you perfectly managed to capture the deeps of love and the complexity of the feelings involved and that the more you fell in love with someone the more "dangerous" it becomes for you (well in the way that you become very vulnerable, as we see with Mik).
It's like getting the chance to look into the life of two humans.
Ok, I hope it doesn't sound to weird but I hope you get what I'm trying to say ^^
All in all, I hope you won't drop the story and I'm realy looking forward to the next chapter!!!
Eleonora
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I'm so sorry for the late reply and I really don't want you to think that I'm ignoring you or anything >_< I just haven't had time to get in here and do right by my readers.
First of all, thank you so much for commenting. It's really a joy to see a reader take that leap! I'm glad you enjoyed the story and that you too see the potential of this pairing that has been abandoned all too soon. I don't really read VF any more as I've basically given up on YA. But you can be certain I haven't given up on this much beloved pairing. I do intend to finish it and the next chapter is coming as I'm about to send it to my beta in a few days. Thanks again for letting me know your thoughts that certainly help me through this. I hope to not disappoint.
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First of all there's no need to apologize as I remember correctly you've posted that there was a staff shortage at your workplace so everyone knows that the workload increases due to that. So it's great that you still find time to continue the story. Thanks for that!
I'm really looking forward to the release of the next chapter. I hope everyone is getting out of there alive! The death of Alexei was more than enough to handle even so I still kinda miss him at times :(
Please let everyone stay alive...well, it's your story and all but I kinda feel nervous about Yohs well-being (since he's being used as an human shield it's no wonder I guess).
Oh well, no matter how everything is going to turn out I'll still continue to read your story :)
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