Crowdfunding Creative Jam story: Faerie School Colection: a door that's always ajar

[kajones_writing]

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[unico_love]

I really like this story!

[siege]

I like what you've done with this.

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[ysabetwordsmith]

This is a haunting story.

>>Even after a hundred years on Earth Willow still kept the door ajar.<<

That needs a comma after "Earth" -- otherwise it look like "Earth Willow" is a proper name, which is confusing.

>>When she looked through she hoped that maybe it would have gone back to the way it was before they had destroyed it. <<

Vague antecedent, as Earth was just mentioned; specify the previous homeworld.