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kailice

[one-shot][Ohmiya] Restoration

Apr 30, 2009 18:53

Title: Restoration
Pairing: Ohmiya
Rating: PG-13
Disclaimer: I own nothing. I don’t even own my wallet, because apparently Johnny owns that, too.
Notes: This story… pretty much wrote itself. You could say I went Ohno-style and just wrote with the flow. Everything came out unexpectedly and differently than I’d planned, but I’m happy with the way it ( Read more... )

oneshot, arashi for dream, fic, ohmiya is totally straight

Comments 55

floweranza May 1 2009, 00:14:14 UTC

HAVE A MILLION COOKIES. I'm terrible at commenting (I'm sorry), but please believe me when I say I enjoyed it immensely.

This was so lovely and beautiful, and your word choice was astounding. :) Thank you for sharing!

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kailice May 1 2009, 01:14:42 UTC

lol you're not terrible at commenting. Your comment seriously makes me happy <333 Thank you!

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kailice May 1 2009, 01:15:11 UTC

YOU'RE so beautiful D:

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kailice May 1 2009, 01:26:44 UTC

OKAY. OHNO IS BEAUTIFUL. I will happily settle with that ♥

kajalmonsta May 1 2009, 00:31:21 UTC

that fic was so beautiful *__*

the things you described, nino's character, ohno's character... are you really sure this is your first fanfic???
i really loved it, thanks a lot for sharing^^

kailice May 1 2009, 01:16:55 UTC

;;__;; Thank you!!

lol I'm sure this is my first! I've written stuff before, but fanfics are new territory. So I'm really glad you liked it!

slowtech May 1 2009, 00:32:28 UTC

The first of many many more to come, I hope. This was gorgeous. :)

kailice May 1 2009, 01:17:56 UTC

Thank you <3 Hopefully more will come soon XD

primroseshows May 1 2009, 01:30:28 UTC

Well good grief, I don't know what you were so nervous about before, because this was beautiful. You really got in deep with Nino and Ohno's feelings towards each other and I loved that. I really like the connection you made with Ohno's insecurity and the storm, as well. ALSO I was inordinately pleased when I realized that they were already in a relationship by this time. I made me feel warm and fuzzy inside. ALSO (I'll shut up soon, I swear) I really like that you incorporated the rest of Arashi at the end there, and Sho giving them towels, aaaaw. ♥

Okay so I also promised you that I'd help give concrit, but this is hard, no thanks to you. If I had to nitpick, there are a few tense changes in the paragraph starting with "So when Aiba's research..." but these are such minor things, the whole fic was gorgeous.

Also I have to say your command of descriptive words is really fantastic. I really felt the heaviness and cold of the rain as I was reading.

Thank you for sharing!! ♥♥♥

kailice May 1 2009, 01:44:43 UTC

YOU ♥ YOU CAN HAVE MY HEART IF YOU WANT IT.
I was nervous because I was a fanfic virgin. My first time D: But you nailed pretty much everything I was hoping to portray.

I really suck at tenses XD I'm trying to fix that. Thanks for nitpicking!

And I've already said this, but ILU <333 At first, I was trying to experiment with the descriptions, to make it more atmosphere than plot. It sort of changed as I was writing, so it makes me beyond happy to know that people like the descriptions.

Thank you for being amazing!! ♥♥♥