First Move

[k4writer02]

Title: First Move, Second Move

Author: Kate, k4writer02

Rating: PG

Disclaimer: Not mine.

Fandom: Friday Night Lights

Word Count: 825

Summary: Julie and Santiago kiss. Santiago kicks himself for letting Julie make the first move. Compliant with

Comments

[leobrat]

OMG, OMG, OMG!!!!!!

*fans herself*

*composes herself*

*freaks out again*

Okay!

Um, 'hot'? Doesn't even *begin* to cover it. The whole idea that Santiago 'claims' her by drawing his thumb over her cheekbone. Shivers And the idea of Julie as Rapunzel, because she so is.

I love that they didn't speak, that all he needed to say was 'tomorrow'. (And I think I'm going to go on home right away and write 'tomorrow', if that's okay with you.)

Please, please post to julie_santiago? And any other FNL writing communities you like?

And...If you wouldn't mind, could I link this at my journal, so I can add it to my Permission To Exist tag, because...This is *so* part of the timeline. I'm so honored. And flattered.

[k4writer02]

::GRIN:: I love your feedback. Thank you so much for being so complimentary. You're the inspiration for this pairing as much as FNL, so it means so much.

I'm so glad you thought the interaction was hot--it's been a long time since I wrote falling-in-love fic, so I just didn't know if I was getting the complete absorption and breathless uncertainty of it right. Glad you think I did, and that the "claiming" made you shiver.

Omg, I can't wait to read about "tomorrow," actually--I really have no more sense than Santiago of what 'after" is like for them. I did post to Julie_Santiago and fridaynight_fic, so thanks for the encouragement!

And I would be so, so honored and flattered if you linked from your journal and made this ficlet part of the Permission to Exist timeline. I love your stories and I'm really thrilled you liked this tribute too.

Now, it seems you have a birthday coming up. Any fic or fanmix requests?

[leobrat]

Oh wow, it's so nice of you to offer! Um, if you wanted to do anything creatively, I'm sure I would *love* it. I always feel guilty with 'gift fic' because I'm horrible at keeping up with my f-list's birthdays. But sigh, I can't get enough of this couple, or really anything with Julie, Santiago, Matt, the Taylors, Billy Riggins, Tyra...you get the idea.

I will be linking it tomorrow- thanks for your permission!

And sigh, you have so gone and done it, Santiago has completely fallen in love with her here, I've read this now *five* times today. And in the part I'm currently writing, well, it's set 'the night after' and it's from Julie's POV, and I'm having *sooooo* much fun in her head now. She's turning into one of those wonderful characters who just lets me know exactly what she's thinking.

Hopefully it will be up some time tomorrow! And I'm incorporating your first request of what happened between Julie and Barnett!

[k4writer02]

Oh, squee. You're teasing now--two requests answered! :) I'll be looking forward to reading "the night after" story sometime tomorrow!

I'm so glad Julie has started talking to you--sometimes it can take a long time for a character to do that, but once it clicks, there it goes and makes sense.

Thanks for the link tomorrow.

Re: Just surfed in from Leobrat's page...

[k4writer02]

Thanks for the feedback! I'm really glad you liked the description, characterization, and Coach cameo!

About the parentheses, what can I say? I grew up reading Ann M Martin Babysitter's Club. Abundant parentheses were bound to be part of my adult prose style. I'm sorry if it was confusing--I'll try to work on that for future stories

[miss_december]

a sorta fairytale is forming in my head, here...

... the curiouser I grow.

nice fic! :)

[k4writer02]

Thanks so much for the feedback--I'm really glad you thought it was nice and that it put "a sorta fairytale" in your mind. :)

[rocketgirl13]

Love this!!! so fantastic. whew *fans self* whew. haha.

[k4writer02]

Thanks for the feedback! I'm flattered you thought it was fantastic, and that it left you fanning yourself--that's the goal. And I love your icon--great picture and framing of Tim's face!

[hope27]

I'm here via leobrat's mention of this and I must say this was awesome! You really have Santiago's voice down and this flows so well.

He couldn’t fathom an after (maybe her father will find out and run him into the ground or Matt Saracen will find out and really fucking snap or Riggins will figure it out and stop telling him how to not injure himself or Mrs. Taylor will strangle him in the office or that leggy blonde, Tyra, will take matters into her own hands-he has no idea who else might kill him or send him back to juvie over this). With her pressed against him, it’s hard to think or care about consequences.

Such a great little passage...made me laugh and sigh all at once because I think all of those would be going through his head, but he wouldn't care.

Great job!