I like it, especially the line "He doesn't ever actually sleep with Michael." I thought it ended the paragraph nicely. Overall, very well done, but towards the end I felt like it was, well, speeding. But not in a good way. : ) Maybe try to keep the pacing more consistent? It seemed like you were in a hurry to get it over with.
Not sure if that was intentional or not though.
Either way it's supercool. Oh! Call me and tell me about Comicon. Or I'll call you, or something.
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Not sure if that was intentional or not though.
Either way it's supercool. Oh! Call me and tell me about Comicon. Or I'll call you, or something.
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